This is such an important project and book. The intentions and the already achieved results (for example the public and official apology, the gathering of information, etc.) are commendable and impressive. It's also lovely that this edition has the cover with their tartan.
However, for me personally, the writing style greatly undermines the overall quality of the content. I’ve learned that it’s possible to hold somebody in very high esteem, have great respect for their work but still not like the work itself.
The writing is, to my taste, often rather unsophisticated and very immature, riddled with childish things like crossings out and correcting them, writing (we jest) after a sentence or footnotes that don't give information but are only a joke. Three examples of those ‘funny’ footnotes:
- ‘It appears that the patriarchy is doing well in hell, what with the only man getting the desk job.’
- Under a text about attaching each part of a cat to the chieftest part of a dead man: ‘If the chieftest part of a man is what we are imagining it is, that must have been pretty hard to attach.’
- After describing that the version of Daemonology intended for London was a little fancier, saying ‘no doubt to suit the more refined tastes of a metropolitan London audience’, there’s the footnote: ‘Plus ça change, eh?’ Not so not unnecessary and immature, but also untrue. The second edition was published when James, the author, became king, and after the first edition already has success. A slightly fancier version suited the occasion and success. Also, why, if you want to make that joke, does it need to be a footnote? You can just put that as a new sentence.
There are many like that, and they’re all unnecessary and often unfunny.
There are many footnotes in general. Even if they do contain helpful information, nine out of ten times they could have just been added to the main text. This many footnotes makes the pages look messy, in my opinion.
The writing style is very informal, which I sometimes found off-putting and amateuristic. I'm not talking about a bit of humour being inappropriate for the subject; I love me some dark humour and I don't see that as disrespectful. It wasn't that. It's more that feeling that they write how they talk and that sometimes and partially works, but not always. And also that it's a bit over the top, a bit of a 'look how funny we are' vibe with the reader going 'o.k., boomer...' (they're not boomers, I know, and I am their age, but I'm just describing that cringy feeling. Hard to explain. As an example, here are the four last sentences of the chapter in which it is explained that magic in those days was considered fact. ‘The belief in magic, then, real as it was, did not cause the bloody horror of the witchcraft trials. The causes of those? Oh, they were very much man-made. Let us explain…’ I find this style, with the question, the oh and the three dots almost physically irksome. Something similar is the last sentence of a paragraph explaining how king James argues that witches exist. ‘OK, witches are real. What next?’ is the sentence before the next chapter. It’s a style that strikes me as what a 15-year-old aspiring writer would do in their naive enthusiasm, not two women even slightly older than I am.
I think one aspect of an editor’s job is to see if the writer uses the same words or phrases too often. Clearly, this editor was fine with them writing that somebody ‘had no truck with’ something seemingly every other page.
We are already informed in the introduction that there are short fiction chapters in the book, written to set the mood. The book doesn’t need those. The facts are already more than enough to set the mood and to use fiction undermines the factual narrative, even though the fiction passages are clearly marked as such. I tried reading two and stopped reading them after that, unless it said that it was mostly actual quotes. For me, making things up to set the mood doesn't go with trying to uncover as many facts as we can.
Truly rude I found how they describe the Bodlean and National Library of Scotland, writing in a derogatory way about how they couldn’t enjoy the view because of blinds protecting the book from ‘dangerous sunshine’ and how the air conditioning was checked by the librarian ‘presumably so the books didn’t spontaneously overheat and burst into flames.’ Why this disrespectful, derogatory nastiness? And so utterly ignorant too.
The build-up of chapters, the structure, somehow doesn't flow. I see what they tried to do - go through every step of the process chronologically. In theory, that should work well but in this case, it really doesn't.
The chosen font, the main one but especially the chapter headers, adds to the book feeling very unserious and gimmicky.
There are many possible illustrations for this topic. But if you want to raise awareness about the facts, then stick to the facts, and don't use ai-created imagery!
Overall, I think that even though the subject matter appeals to a very broad demographic, as it should, and even though many different kinds of people will buy it, only the swooning Outlander crowd will stick around after reading. You can see that in many comments on social media. People messing up facts, idealising the times, etc. People claiming they have not one, but two witches in their ancestry, completely missing the whole point of witches not existing and seemingly too thick to realise that ancestry cannot be traced in any of the known cases. People talking about what lovely dresses witches must've had or that they'd love to have the same herb gardens as 'those healers'. People thinking the Witches of Scotland tartan originated in that time... I even stopped following the Instagram account after too much eyerolling. You even see some of those kinds of things in some of the reviews here. Anyway, my point is - that seems almost the sole demographic they appeal to and, unfortunately, I get that, given how the authors come across in their writing and media. Unfortunately too, I think hardly any man will read it; as a woman, these women make me go "Ah no, don't be like that, you're actually perpetuating the stereotype that most women want to be rid of", so I would fully understand most men rolling their eyes and/or being miffed that even though the authors say they stick to the facts, they're also maintaining the 'all men are tw*ts' vibe.
It happens sometimes, with great causes, that I think: “I wish somebody else was fronting this organisation/talk/march/press conference, as this person, even though I agree with every word, is the type of person that will only annoy rather than engage the intended demographic, or confirm their prejudice or dislike.” That’s what I feel here too.