I really wanted to enjoy Butterfly: Vampire Guild Chronicles, because I love vampires stories! The concept has some cool ingredients: a modern world, with a “Vampire Guild” and a wide range of supernatural abilities (glamour/hypnosis, mind-reading, healing, and more).
The plot. A human woman is turned into a vampire and spends a lot of time asking questions, but most people avoid giving her clear answers. The conflict doesn’t fully take shape until late in the book, when a villain finally appears, and it is someone who wants to torture her because of old bad blood with her sire. Overall, it’s a damsel-in-distress storyline. Sire comes to save her from old enemy.
That said, this book didn’t work for me.
The main character asks an overwhelming, and I mean an overwhelming amount of questions, and the same topics and beats get repeated again. Because it’s written in first person, there’s a lot of internal narration and dialogue to help you follow the story.
The dialogue and character behavior often felt unrealistic. Characters (even villains) conveniently answer questions and confess secrets far too easily, and there were moments where the main character’s reactions didn’t feel believable—like being kidnapped and mostly wanting to talk or meeting a villain and asking about his eye color first.
The romance also felt very rushed and repetitive (neck kissing in nearly every scene), and swung abruptly from dramatic to calm, which made scenes feel inconsistent. Some of the intimate scenes were enjoyable to imagine, even if that was the main standout for me.
Events didn’t always seem to have believable consequences. For example, drained bodies are left in dumpsters or behind trees, yet the human world doesn’t seem to respond in a realistic way—there’s little investigation or public pressure, of why there are so many drained human bodies?
Later, new powers show up suddenly (lightning/storm control) leaving you wonder how many powers these vampires have?
The villain dies super easily, so there are no real dramatics there.
Overall, there are interesting ideas here, but the execution made it a tough read for me.