This tale starts out with a very interesting plotline about Elizabeth moving to London, to live with the Gardiners after Mr Bennet´s death, in order to conduct a secret career as an author, and thus provide for her remaining family in Meryton.
Early on the story starts to set up traps for itself, making logical mistakes, puzzling choices and subplots, and just moving away from coherent thought process altogether, as the book moves forward.
For ex., Elizabeth being a gothic novels´ author is a super well guarded secret, but the reasons for secrecy are unclear. Aside from being a paid author was somewhat "scandalous" for a young lady, the turmoil around this is a muddle = were Lizzy´s books scandalous in content? (not really), is writing for money more scandalous than becoming a governess? does "working" make Elizabeth undesirable or reproachable company? (unclear to say the least!).
If we take Miss Austen´s example as a measuring bar, we know that she was very discreet about her writing, she did consider that being an author was part of her private life, and she didn´t take any action during her lifetime to disclose this to the wider public. But we also know all her family knew of it, and it wasn´t considered scandalous or shameful in any way. Indeed, her writing was admired and hughly valued by her family members, who freely spoke/wrote to Jane about her books and bok characters in their private letters.
From the above, we cannot unquestionably believe that this version of Elizabeth would be so utterly consumed by shame for being an author, that it would drive her to lie, remove herself from social situations, and cause her great distress (to the extent of allowing herself to be manipulated over threats of disclosure).
Lizzy meets Georgiana (and Darcy) over the girl´s admiration of the books, unknowing that Elizabeth is the author, which evolves into a quick and intimate friendship between both ladies, and Darcy´s fast-paced admiration towards Elizabeth (unexplainable projection of traits from canon into this alternate story).
Early on in the story Lizzy and uncle Gardiner walk into the street in Gracechurch Street, and he smells smoke... we can all imagine how quickly were we to read about a devastating fire that would offer oportunity for a "forced proximity" scenario [eye roll]. When the predictable catastrophy unfolds, Darcy is ready to invite the Gardiners to Pemberley after a very recent aquaintance!
One token sample of lazy editing was that when Darcy finds out about a fire in Cheapside, he takes his carrige to convey Georgiana from Bingley´s to the Darcy London home, and he explicitly says he will do so in order to take his horse from there and ride to Cheapside because that would be quicker... only to read in the next scene how Darcy descends from his carriage once he arrives there (what??).
Once at Pemberley, Elizabeth falls in love with Darcy, but still feels her secret career would forever separate her from any man or a respectable marriage (OK!), and when Caroline Bingley discovers her secret and theatens her with scandal, Lizzy complies and runs away to Meryton. The main couple´s separation is dull and drags until Darcy gathers his courage to seek Elizabeth in Meryton.
Another strange glitch is that Bingley had let Netherfield ahead of the story, but he didn´t meet Jane or any of the Bennets because they don´t visit anyone anymore... but he had heard of the family from Sir William, who said they are great neighbours and beloved by the town, and yet somehow Mrs Bennet has managed to keep some kind of social mourning period, shunning visits and banning the girls from society for well over a year (unlikely, unbelivable). The Bennets´ isolation is later explained because Mrs Bennet is ashamed of her relative poverty and the girls´ lack of new dresses. But Bingley´s nonsensical fascination with Jane as soon as he finally meets her goes beyond Bingley´s canon infatuation with Jane at the Meryton assembly, and it rings like a distorted mirroring from canon into this alternate new plotline (as if Bingley had always been magically waiting to be matched up with this Jane, albeit never having met her).
When Elizabeth´s secret is finally revealed to Darcy, he goes into a weird crisis of consciousness and decorum, which is very awkward to read, regardless of its quick positive resolution.
When stories sound interesting, but rely on some cornerstones that don´t make much sense, the result is that readers remain stuck on those points that don´t fit for the whole duration of the story. Logical flaws and coherence mistakes grate and clash with the audience´s inner voice, unless masked by a very strong and compelling narrator... I can´t say that was the case this time.