While a debut novel, “The Lost Deer Queen” leaves a lot to be desired.
While reading TLDQ, I had to consciously remind myself that this is a debut novel, and to not give too much weight to the plot holes. The story has potential but at a point, the inconsistencies between characters and plot became too noticeable to disregard.
In TLDQ, Mae, a bookshop owner, is revealed to be the secret heir to the Deer kingdom after the Royal Family is killed. Coincidentally, the Deer Kingdom also rule over all of the shifters, which makes this reveal even more important. To secure stability in her court, Mae must quickly become married and form an alliance with one of the other Houses. Thus begins the bachelorette romance between her and five princes.
My frustration with this story wasn’t the writing, nor was it how predictable it was. My frustration stems from how the plot felt pieced together with no real cohesion. Much of the story felt half-baked, or as if the author chose popular tropes and built a book around said tropes.
For example, Mae places so much emphasis on her life before finding out that she was a member of the royal family. She owns a bookstore with her best friend, and is in a situationship with a man she doesn’t like. After becoming officially queen, her initial love interest disappears and her job is magically gone. There’s no transition from human to royal, which left me confused why aspects of her life were included to begin with, as they contributed nothing to the story.
Further, I felt that much of Mae’s “royalty” wasn’t fully developed. For example, Mae is only living member of the crown. Knowing that someone just murdered her whole family would lead one to believe that Mae would be heavily guarded, but instead, Mae is given free-reign of the grounds, even going so far as to walk around without guards. Because of this freedom, she’s able to meet a witch, and be put in positions of danger that could have been avoided.
When introduced to the princes that she must date, Mae complained incessantly that she didn’t want to date any of the men and that she “needs time”. She was constantly applying human standards to shifter ones, causing a rift between her, her staff, and me, the reader (side note: can we please not write FMCs who “aren’t like other girls”?). At one point, Mae herself admits to her staff that she isn’t interested in dating two of the men because “I haven’t given them any time”. But I have to ask: Is it Mae that isn’t giving them enough time, or an author who opted to write a book with five love interests, but really only had enough heart for two?
Even more, one of the princes turns out to be secretly gay, which reads very much like the author didn’t want to spend the time actually writing a fifth male love interest.
Speaking of love interests, the second we were introduced to the first male lead (read: Rhysand dupe) we know who the winner is going to be. No matter who comes next, you can’t introduce a male lead as “The most beautiful man I’ve ever seen” and expect your audience to do anything but champion him. This same male character had a weird, unfounded “hatered” towards Mae, which was further made weird by their flirting which merely come across as indifference. This character, a “shadow daddy” truly felt like a trope that the author wanted to write a book around, as they were never enemies.
I still stand by this being a good *first* novel. However, the potential versus the execution fell flat for me.