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The unseen : DON'T TELL THEM YOU CAN SEE
Two years after the Great Blinding plunged the world into darkness, seventeen-year-old Avery’s sight inexplicably returns. But her relief turns to dread when she sees the same ominous message “DON'T TELL THEM YOU CAN SEE." Others who can see again live in terror of The Watchers, a shadowy group determined to control them. Teaming up with fellow survivors, Avery uncovers the dark truth behind the Great Blinding—a conspiracy to suppress knowledge and control humanity. As they prepare to expose The Watchers, Avery and her allies face a deadly battle. Will they succeed, or will the truth remain buried in darkness?
224 pages, Kindle Edition
Published January 5, 2026
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January 27, 2026
I will always support young authors. I’ve been writing since I was 12 and doing all nighters with my cousin in the kitchen as we pour over our crappy laptops. But I did have to quit reading at 42 pages in. The plot of the book drew me in, it sounds fascinating and I love a good dystopian novel. But the grammar and writing errors made it too difficult to continue. The repeated use of words made it monotonous and I started to lose interest. And honestly- her viewing herself in the mirror at the beginning gave early Wattpad vibes before the main character gets sold and sent off to live with one direction or something.
Please *keep* writing, but I do recommend using a free service to proof read help you edit, or maybe a trusted friend or adult
Please *keep* writing, but I do recommend using a free service to proof read help you edit, or maybe a trusted friend or adult
January 27, 2026
Okay But Should Not Be A Published Work
This is a great start for someone who is interested in writing. However, due to the multiple grammatical mistakes and lack of cohesive storytelling, I don’t think this should be a paid work.
I found there was a major lack in following any English grammatical rules that should be grasped by someone who is in high school. It looks like there may have been an editor (there’s an annotation in the book on a line with an incorrect word that leads to a comment in the appendix about not understanding what is being said), but there is so much that needs adjusting. There are many, many spelling errors or wrong words used, i.e. ‘emerged, instead of ‘submerged’ and ‘multiable’ instead of ‘multiple’. Lack of understanding of paragraph structure is prevalent. For example, the author starts a new paragraph with a sentence that should have been used to end the previous paragraph. Or paragraphs are a jumble of thoughts with no cohesion. There are also many run on sentences. There are nameless other mistakes as well, but I believe these are enough to make the point.
Overall, this reads like something you would find on a fantasy writing forum. The author has admitted to taking ideas from spaces like that, or even Reddit. My advice is that this is good practice if you are interested in a future in writing, but writing at this skill level is not really publishable on a mass scale.
This is a great start for someone who is interested in writing. However, due to the multiple grammatical mistakes and lack of cohesive storytelling, I don’t think this should be a paid work.
I found there was a major lack in following any English grammatical rules that should be grasped by someone who is in high school. It looks like there may have been an editor (there’s an annotation in the book on a line with an incorrect word that leads to a comment in the appendix about not understanding what is being said), but there is so much that needs adjusting. There are many, many spelling errors or wrong words used, i.e. ‘emerged, instead of ‘submerged’ and ‘multiable’ instead of ‘multiple’. Lack of understanding of paragraph structure is prevalent. For example, the author starts a new paragraph with a sentence that should have been used to end the previous paragraph. Or paragraphs are a jumble of thoughts with no cohesion. There are also many run on sentences. There are nameless other mistakes as well, but I believe these are enough to make the point.
Overall, this reads like something you would find on a fantasy writing forum. The author has admitted to taking ideas from spaces like that, or even Reddit. My advice is that this is good practice if you are interested in a future in writing, but writing at this skill level is not really publishable on a mass scale.
February 20, 2026
The story line was great. The grammatical and writing errors were hard to get through unfortunately and I thought about DNF. When I read that the author was only 14 I pushed through. I’m glad I did as I did really like the story and her creativity but she needs a real editor to help out. I hope she keeps writing books
February 18, 2026
"The world, once softened by the veil of darkness, was now painfully clear, and with that clarity came an overwhelming sense of vulnerability."
I gave this book 3 stars because I genuinely see the creativity and emotional depth in it. The idea behind the story is strong, and you can tell the author poured a lot of heart into it. There are definitely moments that hit emotionally, and I appreciate the imagination behind the concept.
But to put it in a blunt way... I wasn’t completely satisfied with the book. There were quite a few grammatical errors throughout the book (which happens to the best of us) but it did pull me out of the story at times. The pacing also felt really fast. I wish things had slowed down so we could really get to know the main character and the storyline better.
I especially wanted more development between her and Doilion. He’s so protective of her, but I didn’t feel like we got enough of their connection to fully understand why. I also kept waiting to find out why the best friend betrayed her. That felt like such an important moment, and I wanted more depth there. And Colin… I really wanted more from that storyline. I would have loved some kind of redemption arc, or at least a clearer explanation of why he did what he did. His death felt very quick and without much context, which made it less impactful than it could have been. I also wish we had learned why Doilion was helping him in the first place.
Overall, I think this is a good starter book for the author’s journey. It takes courage to put your work out there, and I definitely want to give props to her for following her dream. I hope she keeps writing, keeps improving, and maybe even comes back to this story one day to tweak and deepen some things. The potential is absolutely there.
Keep working hard and don’t give up over critiques, every author starts somewhere.
I gave this book 3 stars because I genuinely see the creativity and emotional depth in it. The idea behind the story is strong, and you can tell the author poured a lot of heart into it. There are definitely moments that hit emotionally, and I appreciate the imagination behind the concept.
But to put it in a blunt way... I wasn’t completely satisfied with the book. There were quite a few grammatical errors throughout the book (which happens to the best of us) but it did pull me out of the story at times. The pacing also felt really fast. I wish things had slowed down so we could really get to know the main character and the storyline better.
I especially wanted more development between her and Doilion. He’s so protective of her, but I didn’t feel like we got enough of their connection to fully understand why. I also kept waiting to find out why the best friend betrayed her. That felt like such an important moment, and I wanted more depth there. And Colin… I really wanted more from that storyline. I would have loved some kind of redemption arc, or at least a clearer explanation of why he did what he did. His death felt very quick and without much context, which made it less impactful than it could have been. I also wish we had learned why Doilion was helping him in the first place.
Overall, I think this is a good starter book for the author’s journey. It takes courage to put your work out there, and I definitely want to give props to her for following her dream. I hope she keeps writing, keeps improving, and maybe even comes back to this story one day to tweak and deepen some things. The potential is absolutely there.
Keep working hard and don’t give up over critiques, every author starts somewhere.
January 26, 2026
love supporting a young author!!
I really really really wanted to be able to give this five stars but I think that the grammatical/spelling etc. errors that started to become really distracting around the 44th page made it hard to give it that high of a rating but I thought this young author did a great job! I hope to read more of her work in the future and I definitely recommend that you check this out. Just be kind.
I really really really wanted to be able to give this five stars but I think that the grammatical/spelling etc. errors that started to become really distracting around the 44th page made it hard to give it that high of a rating but I thought this young author did a great job! I hope to read more of her work in the future and I definitely recommend that you check this out. Just be kind.
February 17, 2026
I really did like this story although I feel like it went too fast, I also was turned off by all the typos.
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February 2, 2026If you’re looking for a quick KU read that makes you nostalgic for the 2010s dystopian ie divergent, hunger games, maze runner, matched vibes, this is the read for you.
Props to the author who is 14, I discovered this after finishing the book and reading the acknowledgments. Keep writing. This was such a cool concept.
Props to the author who is 14, I discovered this after finishing the book and reading the acknowledgments. Keep writing. This was such a cool concept.
February 5, 2026
If I could give this book 1/2 a star I would.
Plot begins 1% into the book. Minimal background.
Immediately she has visions and turns out she is related to the main antagonist? FMC has major blow ups regarding the visions she receives. She immediately agrees to help out the Vision Keepers. MMC is holding her hand and getting comfy with her immediately it felt too forced. The conversation between each characters was forced no real connection. I’m sorry her best friend in the end turned on her? Many many plot holes. The writing reminded me of a wattpad story. In mind the author was 14 when she published this but editor should’ve helped with the way it flowed and to clear certain things up.
Plot begins 1% into the book. Minimal background.
Immediately she has visions and turns out she is related to the main antagonist? FMC has major blow ups regarding the visions she receives. She immediately agrees to help out the Vision Keepers. MMC is holding her hand and getting comfy with her immediately it felt too forced. The conversation between each characters was forced no real connection. I’m sorry her best friend in the end turned on her? Many many plot holes. The writing reminded me of a wattpad story. In mind the author was 14 when she published this but editor should’ve helped with the way it flowed and to clear certain things up.
March 8, 2026
Omg this book is amazing! I don’t know how you could think of that as a plot I literally cried sooooooooo much when Branden died and also when dolion “died” and I can’t believe zayland jumped. I wish Dolion and Avery kissed on the balcony tho. There were some grammar errors and sometimes the story was hard to follow but even tho this book had an amazing storie. This is like the PERFECT book for me bc it combines romance and dystopian! If you’re reading this Kavya PLEASE KEEP WRITING! I promise you I will read everything you write. As a 14 year old you are really inspiring to me to write a book or songs and that I am not to young! (I might be to dyslexic tho but that’s ok lol) I read this right after reading PERFECT and FLAWED by Cecelia ahern and I feel like this is the same vibe but magical! Thank you for writing this masterpiece!
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March 15, 2026
I am the target audience for this book. I saw the concept for The Unseen and hit "buy" without a second thought; the premise is genuinely amazing. But unfortunately, this was a massive miss for me. There is a heartbreaking gap between the story the author wanted to tell and the technical reality of the book sitting on my shelf.
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The pacing of this book is baffling. The first 50 pages are pure, high-octane drama; we are 1% into the story and the FMC is already having world-shattering visions and discovering she’s related to the main antagonist. It’s a sprint. Then, the final 50 pages explode into a chaotic finale.
But the middle? It felt like wading through molasses. It was drawn out for what felt like an eternity with very little character development to justify the length. We go from 100mph to a dead stop, only to drag ourselves toward a finish line that doesn't quite resolve the journey.
I love a good mystery, but there is a difference between "intriguing breadcrumbs" and "pieces that just don’t fit." I spent half the book asking "Why?" and never got an answer:
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The Logic: Why were people being blinded? What was the functional purpose of the fish people in tubes?
The Atmosphere: These elements felt like they were included because they sounded "cool" or "dark," but they lacked any connective tissue to the actual plot.
The Relationships: Everything felt forced. The MMC is getting cozy and holding the FMC's hand almost immediately, and she joins the Vision Keepers with zero hesitation. Without a foundation of real conversation or connection, the "big betrayal" by the best friend at the end didn't hurt—it just felt like another random plot point.
As a reader, it’s hard to stay immersed when the basic mechanics of storytelling are breaking down.
Grammar & Prose: The lack of basic sentence and paragraph structure made it a difficult slog. Seeing words like "multiable" instead of "multiple" or "emerged" when the character was clearly "submerged" pulled me right out of the moment.
The Editorial Mystery: There is literally an annotation in the book where a confusing line leads to a comment in the appendix stating the editor didn't understand the sentence. If the team behind the book didn't understand it, how is the reader supposed to?
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It’s clear the author has a vivid imagination and a real passion for these tropes, but imagination isn't enough to carry a paid work. Between the massive plot holes, the "insta-love" dynamics, and the jarring technical errors, The Unseen feels unfinished.
I really wanted to champion this one because of that killer concept, but the execution just wasn't there. It needs a heavy structural and line edit to truly let the story shine.
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The pacing of this book is baffling. The first 50 pages are pure, high-octane drama; we are 1% into the story and the FMC is already having world-shattering visions and discovering she’s related to the main antagonist. It’s a sprint. Then, the final 50 pages explode into a chaotic finale.
But the middle? It felt like wading through molasses. It was drawn out for what felt like an eternity with very little character development to justify the length. We go from 100mph to a dead stop, only to drag ourselves toward a finish line that doesn't quite resolve the journey.
I love a good mystery, but there is a difference between "intriguing breadcrumbs" and "pieces that just don’t fit." I spent half the book asking "Why?" and never got an answer:
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The Logic: Why were people being blinded? What was the functional purpose of the fish people in tubes?
The Atmosphere: These elements felt like they were included because they sounded "cool" or "dark," but they lacked any connective tissue to the actual plot.
The Relationships: Everything felt forced. The MMC is getting cozy and holding the FMC's hand almost immediately, and she joins the Vision Keepers with zero hesitation. Without a foundation of real conversation or connection, the "big betrayal" by the best friend at the end didn't hurt—it just felt like another random plot point.
As a reader, it’s hard to stay immersed when the basic mechanics of storytelling are breaking down.
Grammar & Prose: The lack of basic sentence and paragraph structure made it a difficult slog. Seeing words like "multiable" instead of "multiple" or "emerged" when the character was clearly "submerged" pulled me right out of the moment.
The Editorial Mystery: There is literally an annotation in the book where a confusing line leads to a comment in the appendix stating the editor didn't understand the sentence. If the team behind the book didn't understand it, how is the reader supposed to?
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It’s clear the author has a vivid imagination and a real passion for these tropes, but imagination isn't enough to carry a paid work. Between the massive plot holes, the "insta-love" dynamics, and the jarring technical errors, The Unseen feels unfinished.
I really wanted to champion this one because of that killer concept, but the execution just wasn't there. It needs a heavy structural and line edit to truly let the story shine.
April 2, 2026
*2.5 rounded up
I was completely confused the entire time, the only saving grace was I really enjoyed the concept. This had the chance to be a dystopian/sci-fi series but the pages and word count really held the entire thing back. Maybe if I was younger I would’ve enjoyed this more. But even then I would’ve loved to seen more in depth about the characters, why it was the way it was, how life was before. Instead I got put straight into the plot that was moving at the speed of light and I kept confusing the characters. There was no world building to ease you in. Honestly never felt so confused. I wish this was executed better because this would’ve been incredible.
I read the author was young, which is amazing however what were the editors thinking?? With great guidance this book would’ve have been incredible, the main concept is perfect I loved that idea, the action taken to put that into words, could’ve been better- but now I understand it’s a young author it leads me into the question as to why these editors didn’t press harder.
I was completely confused the entire time, the only saving grace was I really enjoyed the concept. This had the chance to be a dystopian/sci-fi series but the pages and word count really held the entire thing back. Maybe if I was younger I would’ve enjoyed this more. But even then I would’ve loved to seen more in depth about the characters, why it was the way it was, how life was before. Instead I got put straight into the plot that was moving at the speed of light and I kept confusing the characters. There was no world building to ease you in. Honestly never felt so confused. I wish this was executed better because this would’ve been incredible.
I read the author was young, which is amazing however what were the editors thinking?? With great guidance this book would’ve have been incredible, the main concept is perfect I loved that idea, the action taken to put that into words, could’ve been better- but now I understand it’s a young author it leads me into the question as to why these editors didn’t press harder.
April 5, 2026
2.5 ⭐️
With a bit more editing this book could be really good. The concept was really interesting however the writing was a little distracting and slowed it down from being the fast read it could have been. There were a lot of times where phrases or words were repeated a lot. Within one paragraph the word tree was said 7 times. Due to the writing I felt a little disconnected to the characters and world but again with more editing and not so much rushing scenes that seem like they’re important, it could make a really good book.
HOWERVER!!! This having been written by a 14, Yes FOURTEEN, year old it’s really good. I know for damn sure I wouldn’t be writing anything this good at 14. Hell my English teacher was still probably yelling at me about repeating words so much when I was 16 so it’s a very good effort.
With a bit more editing this book could be really good. The concept was really interesting however the writing was a little distracting and slowed it down from being the fast read it could have been. There were a lot of times where phrases or words were repeated a lot. Within one paragraph the word tree was said 7 times. Due to the writing I felt a little disconnected to the characters and world but again with more editing and not so much rushing scenes that seem like they’re important, it could make a really good book.
HOWERVER!!! This having been written by a 14, Yes FOURTEEN, year old it’s really good. I know for damn sure I wouldn’t be writing anything this good at 14. Hell my English teacher was still probably yelling at me about repeating words so much when I was 16 so it’s a very good effort.
April 6, 2026
this author has such a creative mind for storytelling and writing, especially at the age of fourteen!! That is why i’m giving the book three stars, and i would love to give it more however, the amount of grammar errors and repetition of words or poorly written sentences was quite hard to read through. The only reason i pushed through was because i was really interested in finding out how the author would portray her ideas because i loved the sound of a new dystopian book. I also wish there was longer detailed scenes, which weren’t skipped over, especially the end scene which felt a little rushed. however, i did cry at the end.
In saying all of this, please keep writing and find a good editor who will help you make your books the best they can possibly be because you have the ability to become a great author.
In saying all of this, please keep writing and find a good editor who will help you make your books the best they can possibly be because you have the ability to become a great author.
April 13, 2026
⭐️/5
I hate to be that person or be this blunt but this might be the worst book I’ve ever read. If I could give it 0 stars I would. The writing is horrible and all over the place, there is a crazy amount of grammatical errors and the plot has so many holes that I could not keep up. I tried to give this one the benefit of the doubt but after seeing how honored was spelled I gave up. This book is horrendous and I honestly can’t believe it’s a published piece. I really think the author should take this book down and do some editing and also spell checking. I hope that she does and I come across this one when it’s in a better state because really the storyline has so much potential. Especially when the main character opens her eyes for the first time and sees all the “don’t tell them you can see” scribbles around the room. I do not recommend reading this one.
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I hate to be that person or be this blunt but this might be the worst book I’ve ever read. If I could give it 0 stars I would. The writing is horrible and all over the place, there is a crazy amount of grammatical errors and the plot has so many holes that I could not keep up. I tried to give this one the benefit of the doubt but after seeing how honored was spelled I gave up. This book is horrendous and I honestly can’t believe it’s a published piece. I really think the author should take this book down and do some editing and also spell checking. I hope that she does and I come across this one when it’s in a better state because really the storyline has so much potential. Especially when the main character opens her eyes for the first time and sees all the “don’t tell them you can see” scribbles around the room. I do not recommend reading this one.
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February 21, 2026
I will be honest, this was hard for me to read and I did DNF but I think it could be an amazing book with more development. There were many spelling and grammar errors that could have been fixed and the pacing could be improved. Considering the author was 14 when she wrote this, I was very impressed because writing a book and self publishing can be really hard and I think she did an amazing job. The concept was very creative and interesting I just think that with a rewrite or two (to develop the plot and characters) and more editing it could be much better.
April 24, 2026
I really enjoyed the plot and storyline of this book. I think the book should’ve been longer or a series rather than a standoff. The last couple of pages felt rushed and confusing. This author is WAY younger and for her debut novel I’m just disappointed in her editor and publisher for not reviewing and editing grammatical/ spelling mistakes .
This book had so much potential for a better ending/ series but who knows? Maybe the author would write an alternate version. Overall I enjoyed my time reading this book.
This book had so much potential for a better ending/ series but who knows? Maybe the author would write an alternate version. Overall I enjoyed my time reading this book.
February 24, 2026
dnf @ 55%
I think the concept of the book was very cool, but the story's pacing was all over the place and the grammar issues really pull you out of the story. I think the character and world building was very surface-level and rushed, which also made it hard to get into the book. Reading the other reviews, I've found out that the author is 14 years old and this is honestly a really good start. I would love to come back to this book once it has been revised and fleshed out!
I think the concept of the book was very cool, but the story's pacing was all over the place and the grammar issues really pull you out of the story. I think the character and world building was very surface-level and rushed, which also made it hard to get into the book. Reading the other reviews, I've found out that the author is 14 years old and this is honestly a really good start. I would love to come back to this book once it has been revised and fleshed out!
April 1, 2026
(1,5 stjerner)
Positive ting:
- Var vild med ideen af bogen og syntes den var kreativ, men dårligt fuldført.
Negative ting:
- Mange stavefejl, alt for mange metaforer og retoriske spørgsmål, som gjorde den meget ensformig at læse.
- Der var alt for mange karakterer med, hvilket gjorde jeg ikke kunne finde rundt i, hvem var hvem.
- Urealistisk dialoger
En bog der var svær at komme igennem, men slutningen gør bogen lidt mere god. Har mange spørgsmål som jeg ville ønske, jeg havde fået svar på.
Positive ting:
- Var vild med ideen af bogen og syntes den var kreativ, men dårligt fuldført.
Negative ting:
- Mange stavefejl, alt for mange metaforer og retoriske spørgsmål, som gjorde den meget ensformig at læse.
- Der var alt for mange karakterer med, hvilket gjorde jeg ikke kunne finde rundt i, hvem var hvem.
- Urealistisk dialoger
En bog der var svær at komme igennem, men slutningen gør bogen lidt mere god. Har mange spørgsmål som jeg ville ønske, jeg havde fået svar på.
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February 17, 2026
DNF @ 3%
Horribly written. Very little back story and just jump into her awakening. Fine, no big deal. But then, how is she THAT self aware when she is finally able to see. She didn't seem disoriented at all. I think it could have been a good story, but so derivative, contrived, and disingenuous, I couldn't get into it.
Horribly written. Very little back story and just jump into her awakening. Fine, no big deal. But then, how is she THAT self aware when she is finally able to see. She didn't seem disoriented at all. I think it could have been a good story, but so derivative, contrived, and disingenuous, I couldn't get into it.
February 22, 2026
Great story
Amazing story, its a little jumpy, and definitely has some grammer errors, but if imma be honest for a small writer its awesome! Proof read work and feel free to get into detail or drag the story on, a book is never too long!
Amazing story, its a little jumpy, and definitely has some grammer errors, but if imma be honest for a small writer its awesome! Proof read work and feel free to get into detail or drag the story on, a book is never too long!
February 28, 2026
Eh
Good idea. Poor execution. Grammar. Words that are just wrong... I would have assisted in corrections but that feature is no longer available. Needs more character development and less rushed.
Good idea. Poor execution. Grammar. Words that are just wrong... I would have assisted in corrections but that feature is no longer available. Needs more character development and less rushed.
March 18, 2026
This wasn’t a terrible book but it definitely needs improvement. I’m throughly impressed that a 14 year old wrote this. It’s a great storyline with alot of potential, it just hasn’t quite been executed well. There’s a lot of grammatical and spelling errors throughout.
March 20, 2026
saw this as a writing prompt in reddit way before (https://www.reddit.com/r/WritingPromp...) and was really intrigued with the book's synopsis. book was very hard to read as there were many spelling and grammatical errors
March 26, 2026
The plot was okay. For a first book this seems okay. The plot did seem similar to many others I’ve read and there was nothing really that captivated me or anything like that. Loads of spelling and grammar errors. And the layout wasn’t that great either.
April 28, 2026
4 stars
It was interesting definitely took turns from what I usually read and I know younger audiences will love this book. For 14 year old it’s trully amazing and I hope you never lose your passion for writing.
It was interesting definitely took turns from what I usually read and I know younger audiences will love this book. For 14 year old it’s trully amazing and I hope you never lose your passion for writing.
February 2, 2026
amazing story.
Very well written. A couple typing errors here and there but that’s natural! I loved the thrill and all the intense feelings from the story!
Very well written. A couple typing errors here and there but that’s natural! I loved the thrill and all the intense feelings from the story!
February 6, 2026
holy grammar mistakes and pick me girl
February 10, 2026
this isn't my usual genre however I did enjoy it it kept me intrigued and at the end the twists where twisting but it also felt unfinished.
February 17, 2026
a fourteen year old wrote this!!!!
Keep writing kid, you will only get better. Brilliant idea for a story. Expand on each thought. You rocked it!
Keep writing kid, you will only get better. Brilliant idea for a story. Expand on each thought. You rocked it!
February 27, 2026
this book has a good plot but i was ready to dnf multiple times due to spelling and grammatical errors. overall i did enjoy it though. maybe in the future re-release with an editor.
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