I feel like I just wasted a lot of my time.
Normally when I don't enjoy a book, I find a one or two star review that matches my experience, I read it, I feel vindicated, I move on. There are currently no such reviews for this book, thus I feel obligated to write one.
To begin, I must say that this Author clearly can write well, has excellent command of language, and an interesting overall concept, so I allowed an extra star for this. I still read the entire book because I was determined to give it the benefit of the doubt, and that is honestly a win. I WANTED to like this book.
Additionally, I usually forgive spelling errors and/or typos, but this one had a lot. I started reporting them after I let a bunch slide. Gave me something fun to do while trying to drag my way through the story.
The plot does not make sense, I'm afraid. If Maximus had planned all along to wipe out the outer rings, he could have just done it. He didn't need to plant Brooker, he didn't need to lure in Shadera, he CERTAINLY did not need to force Greyson to marry her. He was an incomprehensible caricature of evil for the sake of evil with no real motivation or rhythm to his actions. The overt bludgeoning we received in lieu of characterisation would necessitate the following:
- Maximus would have killed Mikel and probably Elara as soon as he discovered their affair. In fact, he probably would have had Mikel killed as soon as he vowed with Elara purely for being her former lover.
- If he didn't do that, he for sure would have killed them all once he figured out that Greyson wasn't his.
- Once schmucky mcgee and her family witnessed Greyson with his mask off, Maximus, man we were led to believe he was, would have JUST KILLED THEM. 'Oh now he has to take the vow because of the loophole' no. Simply kill the witnesses. Is this your first day as an evil dictator?
- At the end he complains that he would have just kept Shadera imprisoned in order to manipulate Jameson and Jaeger, but because of Greyson removing his mask he had to change tactics. No, you didn't. Just be an evil dictator about it? This particular little mechanism felt to me like the author reeeally wanted to write a forced proximity, arranged marriage type situation and tried to strongarm the plot to comply.
- Maximus had people executed for relationships across the rings. Why would Greyson unmasking suddenly override this law?
Other issues I have:
- Omniscient Maximus became tedious. I'm all for villains being one step ahead but there's only so many gloating reveals I can tolerate.
- The political benefit to forcing Shadera and Greyson to vow is insultingly flimsy. Why would you need to send a message to the boundary when you're on the brink of fully exterminating the boundary anyway?!
- lots of telling instead of showing. For example, we could have easily ascertained that Maximus was a raging misogynist without needing to be so on the nose by calling women 'lesser' and 'lower' and 'subservient'. Men who actually believe these things just don't talk like that. I just felt like I was being hit over the head with things that should have been more subtle, and it made me as a reader feel like the Author had no faith whatsoever in my comprehension skills.
- Making gang r@pe part of the vow ceremony seemed like it was just for shock value. There is no way that Lira just happened to discover some paperwork at the last minute that said 'by the way, during the consummation ceremony, all the top government officials get to have a go', and this was not something that anyone had ever mentioned? Especially when it was apparently common knowledge that the couple would go into the chambers and be *watched* for the first bit. I understand the Author was attempting to show how women were treated, and that the fear and continued abuse kept them quiet about it, but it was stated that it was done IN FRONT OF THE HUSBANDS WHO WERE FORCED TO WATCH. Even in a society where married women are not allowed to speak, surely the men would discuss this particular experience amongst themselves.
- We are told that purity is sooo highly valued for Elite women and yet Maximus pimps out Lira to his buddies. Yes, it's to show he's a monster, and to give Lira motivation blah blah. It doesn't make sense. Another case of being told something that doesn't align with what we're shown.
- Lira runs after the family dinner and hides out with Callum. She also attends rebel meetings. Maximus says he knows where she is (pesky omniscient Maximus) but for some reason she's allowed to pick Shadera's wedding dress, leave notes and medicine in the apartment, AND she's on the platform, running the ceremony and the media feeds?! You're telling me Maximus wouldn't have had the Veyra drag her ass back, and either imprisoned her or executed her? No?
- Maximus is so determined for this vow to happen. He forces Greyson and Shadera to live together to 'get to know each other' but then acts like it's some horror that Greyson may have slept with her? My brother, you are making them get married.
- Maximus, who is all about control, image, propaganda, had Shadera and Greyson beaten right before the vow ceremony. They, particularly Shadera, are visibly injured. Why would he want that?! I kept expecting some kind of elite healing technology or at least a makeup team but no, apparently he needs to force a vow for appearances and simultaneously doesn't care about appearances. Baffling.
- There's just a significant lack of medical care going on. Yes, it's supposed to be a 'dark' story full of violence and whatnot but Shadera takes a fair few EXTREME beatings in an incredibly short window of time, either has no access to or refuses medical help, and beyond some wincing and/or blacking out when getting dressed or undressed, it's never again ADdressed. Yeah she's a badass, but the human body does in fact have limits.
- Why would the vow ceremony in the Heart be completely different to whatever goes on in the outer rings? Greyson explains it to Shadera like she's never heard of the concept before. She's a mercenary who sneaks into the Heart for contracts, and she's banging the top spy in the outer rings, yet she doesn't know anything about the very public Heart vow ceremonies?! Do people in the outer rings not get married?
- The Callum/Lira love scene dragged for what seemed like 83 pages. The whole book seemed far longer than necessary, to be fair, but that scene in particular dragged. Also, we had been told that they had been lovers five years prior, and yet Callum was talking like it was their first time. It sort of felt like the scene had originally been written as a 'first time' scene, and then the Author went back and wrote that they had been together before, but forgot to adjust the spicy bit.
- Lira's abuse was really just plonked in out of nowhere. I would have expected that to have had some kind of impact on her intimacy with Callum but there's no connection between the two. I feel it disrespected the gravity of what she went through, and definitely made it seem like the scene between her and Callum was just there for the sake of it.
- Speaking of sex for the sake of it, what the hell was the point of Greyson's scene with the prostitute? Friend with benefits?!?? Plot device to inspire jealousy in Shadera later???? I feel like being rough with a sex worker doesn't line up with who Greyson is supposed to be. It's giving 'I have no say in my life so I take it out on someone I see as lower than myself so I can have a little power trip and feel in control for once' and that is NOT a good look for our MMC.
- Shadera's intimate scene with Jameson makes a tiny bit more sense because we get to see how he's in love with her but she really isn't in love with him. SO THEN WHY does she act like he means so much more to her once she is threatened by bloody Omniscient Maximus?
- Schmucky Mcgee (Greyson's original fiancee, so irrelevant I can't remember her name) and her family are never mentioned again. For people that would have allegedly caused significant problems, they certainly disappeared perfectly fine from the narrative.
- The masks make no sense. There, I said it. 'Oh but it's a metaphor for loss of identity and conforming and being oppressed' so then why is it the elite only that are required to wear them?! Especially in such a Big Brother Is Watching You ass society (OMNISCIENT MAXIMUS) surely you'd want to strip people of any kind of privacy or ability to hide. Also shocked nobody was impersonating anyone else at any point, because THEY ALL HAVE BLOODY MASKS.
- The cardinal ring folk don't mask because they're not elite. Unless they're working in the Heart for members of the elite. Then they have to mask. Even though masking is supposed to be a status symbol. Say it with me once again, The Masks Make No Sense!
- Why did so many people have their guns on Maximus, only for each of them to take the time to deliver him a monologue or whatever?! After Shadera and Greyson's little bet I would have thought a bullet would have gone into his skull a LOT faster. Even Elara took her damn time just for the sake of what, a cool reveal? When the platform was overrun with Veyra?? Take the shot from behind the altar, you fool. Should have done it a LOT earlier.
I am beyond frustrated.
I think, if you enjoyed Powerless, but wanted something a bit darker, more violent, and spicy, you might enjoy this book.
I did not enjoy Powerless.