the end reset what could’ve been a decent book
I don’t really know what it was about this book, it sounded good from a blurb on a reel, so I got it.
There’s something that feels disjointed and not cohesive, like certain parts of the story didn’t flow, or that it was written in parts and then not meshed well together. I really didn’t feel invested with these characters, there didn’t feel like any chemistry, and the hockey trope ended up just being an afterthought so that the readers into hockey romance would be interested in picking this book up.
*Spoilers*
The beginning was confusing and weird . How Jax and fmc met and how he saved her-How a college hockey player would’ve been able to get ejected and make it outside- the whole start felt weird and incomplete- more like it wasn’t written well, instead of how everything was purposefully thought out, which you find out in the end- (in the epilogue) that he had planned to meet Fmc . He had basically been stalking her since he was 14, because his stepdad was her biological dad and because fmc lied and said her mom killed her dad (Jax’s stepdad) and not her @busive stepdad. So he apparently kept tabs on her- thinking her spoiled but also not? If he had actually done his homework or “stalking”, he would’ve known right off the bat that she was a victim. I think it would’ve made more sense to put this scene in the beginning instead of making it feel like an afterthought at the end, and giving more context and complexity. It would’ve made so much more sense why Jax is so invested- instead of making this feel like an instalove trope (not a favorite of mine). Finding out at the end how he stalked and potentially planned a downfall for both her and her step dad- didn’t make a lot of sense, if he did do his homework he’d have known sooner she was a victim, if he truly stalked her and she was “his” he would’ve known she was in an awful living situation- so he basically let her live 5+ years in hell. That makes him a terrible love interest. I started out appreciating Jax in the beginning, out of the three, he seemed the only one who actually cared about the Fmc, his “stalking” and what he witnessed, he tried taking steps in order to free her, care for her, and protect her. The beginning was frustrating how the Fmc was pretty much intimate with everyone but him even though he was most involved in her. It almost felt like she was playing favorites and him protecting and being there for her wasn’t noticed or appreciated? The other guys didn’t go to any great lengths, didn’t put in the time- in fact, one of them showed up to her house, creeped in her room- basically got her caught- even though the 3 knew her dad was nuts, possessive, and could unalive her, they legit kept putting her in positions to get caught and risk her life. How can a reader be invested in a relationship where the MMC is acting so dumb, he’s putting her life in danger (all of them, but especially callum)? Then at the end you think “Jax is probably the best because he cared for her from the start” and it ends with him saying, “he’s pulled all the stings and he’ll never tell her the truth, he’ll let her keep being so grateful and let her Pu**y keep thanking him” there’s a fine line when you’re making stalking sexy, vs gross and creepy. He immediately became gross, the possessiveness no longer sexy- Katie, you turned your mmc into an absolute f-boy, creep. And the grosser part is that it wasn’t just Jax but zephyr knew about it too. I can understand the duplicity but then having that inner monologue? it reset the entire tone of the book and made him so gross. As a reader, the ending felt like she ended up in a cage, and she has no idea, no power, zero control over her life and body. She didn’t end up with sexy possessive men- she ended up with a manipulative creep who thinks her body is his belonging, and not a sexy mutual feeling where she knows she owns them. that inner dialogue killed that for me. He will let her body keep thanking him? That’s so gross. That felt so transactional. Her body will be the currency he cashes in on as payment for “saving her life” The ending relationship isn’t cohesive and fair, Jax’s continued attitude of “she was mine first and I want her all to myself, mine, mine mine” is a poor representation of reverse harem romances. And lastly, the hockey segment just felt like filler. I still don’t understand the point of the hockey captain and why he did what he did or the point in adding about him liking Callium- was there any real point to that drama? That plot point wasn’t well developed.
Katie, do us all a favor and redeem this book, write a sequel book where she finds out the lies, leaves them, becomes an independent, strong, boss B and then they have to grovel- please for the love of everything give the Fmc her autonomy- flip the narrative to her owning THEM.