The biggest obstacle for me was the writing itself. The phrasing is often awkward and repetitive, creating a rhythm that disrupts the pacing rather than supporting it. Instead of sinking into the story, I found myself stumbling over sentences, pulled out of the narrative again and again. The book feels in need of a strong editing pass. One that could smooth the language and give the story room to breathe.
Tonally, the world also feels uncertain about what it wants to be. There are modern elements like cell phones, yet the setting and diction lean toward traditional fantasy, creating a disconnect that never fully resolves. The values and atmosphere feel slightly off-kilter, as though the story is caught between genres without committing to either.
In the edition I received from the author (thank you, Owen), two stories don't seem to connect in a meaningful way. That structural choice further disrupted my reading experience. Just as I began to look for direction or thematic payoff, the narrative seemed to drop off abruptly, like stepping forward and finding no ground beneath you.
I understand this is meant to be a novelette, but for me, the format works against the story. A novella, or a more complete collection of interconnected novelettes, might have given the narrative more stability and allowed readers to orient themselves before the ending arrives. Megan's story, in particular, reads like part of a series (which it is), but the ending was so abrupt that it left me questioning the purpose of encountering it in this fragmented way.
There are ideas here, and glimpses of something that could work with refinement, but as it stands, the book feels incomplete rather than intentionally spare. Readers who are more forgiving of rough prose or experimental structure may have a different experience, but this one ultimately didn't come together for me.