Proofreader desperately needed!
The story line is good, characters are well defined and enjoyable. But if future installments are planned, please enlist the help of one who can correct the many, many errors in punctuation, spelling and vocabulary before publication! There are no breaks in the story to separate events, giving the reader whiplash, jumping scenes. Also helpful would be a dictionary. ‘Discrete: individually, separate and distinct’. ‘Discreet: careful and circumspect in speech or actions’. ‘To’ and ‘Too’.....look them up!