Too short
Was really too short, I was able to read this in an hour. Yes that's nice sometimes, but it cost some details slipping out.
*SPOILER* For instance when Rock took Gloria away, he took her to an island. But then they were beginning to have sex, but there was no mention of a bed or house on the beach until apparently they were.
The last thing I had a problem with was some of the dialogue. It could be on one paragraph, not divided into two.