One more take

by A.V LENNOX

ONE MORE TAKE

Lilly Carter is a promising screenwriter who cannot believe her luck when she is finally welcomed into Hollywood, she finally has the chance to prove herself on the biggest project of her career.

There’s just one the film’s star is Vivienne Laurent, the world-famous actress who broke Lilly’s heart years ago. Forced to work side by side, Lilly and Vivienne must confront the feelings they buried and the questions neither dared to answer. As old sparks reignite and carefully guarded secrets come to light, the line between their past and present begins to blur. Are they still the same people? Or has fame created a division so strong that their ending cannot be rewritten?

Sometimes the greatest love stories deserve one more take.

Genres: Romance, Lesbian

201 pages, Kindle Edition

Published August 22, 2026

Reviews

[Alék · Rating 1 out of 5]

waste of time

I’m genuinely upset I spent $13 on this. The dialogue is so painfully unnatural that it constantly pulled me out of the story. Almost every interaction is reduced to these clipped, one-word exchanges that no actual human being would have unless they were communicating exclusively through a series of grunts. It’s not atmospheric or minimalist it’s just bad writing. I kept waiting for the dialogue to start sounding like people talking, and it never did. $13 I will never see again.

[Amina Khan · Rating 5 out of 5]

I love supporting debut authors! This was such a pleasant read from start to finish, i don’t usually review new sapphic books but when they are self published and THIS GOOD? I have to. I definitely recommend, this gives tshoeh but with way more spice!

[Reese Boutin · Rating 3 out of 5]

i enjoyed the book but i do have to say it was very rushed. it IS short book but i think the story and characters deserved more time. i would have loved more details and pages to really have the characters and side characters built and feel more real. i also think that the writing was a bit off when it came to conversations, literally just the convos. the author can write!!! i loooove the way they write but is some instances i found that it was the same template for every conversation which made it a bit irritating. also some times i had no idea who was speaking because it was a very back and forth conversation. idk if that even makes sense. loved it but could have been a lot better with more time :)

[Venuss · Rating 2.75 out of 5]

I was really excited for this read but unfortunately didn’t leave it fully satisfied.

The early chapters held and promised interesting depth and character dynamics. But it ended up falling flat in ways due to timelines and not enough being given through dialogue. In fact the dialogue most of the time felt very stiff and non differentiating, especially when letters or text messages or read, lots of it can cause confusion.

I felt a lot of arcs were rushed as if the idea of this story was all there but the remembrance of having to execute said story wasn’t as every thing is hit so quickly without being earned or explained much. I mean even the ending felt very abrupt.

[Gwenyth Daretany · Rating 1.25 out of 5]

I really wanted to enjoy this book but it felt quite impossible. Aside from the plot holes and the authors desire to resolve any major conflict in two pages to get back to the characters having sex, the grammatical errors made it physically hard to read. There were missing words, double words, confusing dialogue patterns, missing capital letters, and more. The book itself should have been read through at least two more times before being published. As for the plot; it started strong and quickly resolved any major conflicts; such as one of the women (Lilly) dating someone else, we don't get a conversation, or really anything more than a singular sentence of what Lilly did about it (she did nothing) before jumping back into Viv. Working with Amanda everyday and not saying ANYTHING about not wanting another date was so unrealistic, and this is just one example. Most characters just disappeared once Viv and Lilly kissed. I felt my relationship with Lilly and Viv was not strong enough before they dove back into their relationship for me to ignore the harmful and lack of decisions being made.

[Ashleyyy · Rating 1.5 out of 5]

it almost feels like it was written by two different people, the first 100 pages were genuinely quite good and then after it becomes a complete mess. the timelines and the characters literally stop making any sense out of nowhere. the build up they do in the first 100 pages becomes essentially useless since the mc doesnt have a redemption arc, they just resolve the conflict without actually resolving anything. i was a bit hopeful at the beginning but its genuinely just bad. dnfed at 60%

[Anahi · Rating 5 out of 5]

I love this book so much, the yearning is incomparable. The characters genuinely do hold this special bond that’s unbreakable. I love all the themes in this book that made me think twice about my life, it was just so beautiful!

[Madeleine Cohen · Rating 2 out of 5]

I truly don’t think the author read through this book before publishing it. The grammatical and formatting errors are more than enough to take anyone out of this story. The premise isn’t bad, the execution needs work

[Patricia A · Rating 5 out of 5]

read in a day

I loved this story. I am a sucker for anything Hollywood. A.V delivered. I found Lilly and Vivian’s journey a true testament to true love. The dialogue between them was so good when they were teenagers and adults. Loved it !!!

[mikmik · Rating 2.25 out of 5]

ilang months ko pa inantay 'to sa epub tas yung story meh??? maganda sana yung trope pero wtf sa transition ng story habang binabasa mo na. ang stiff pa ng dialogue, ampanget ng writing, yung setting di mo ma-gets basta leche sayang oras

[Lot · Rating 4 out of 5]

Cute story

[Eleanor Konrad · Rating 5 out of 5]

Such an insane book

[nini ♡ · Rating 1 out of 5]

dnfed

[Luvvfannys · Rating 4.75 out of 5]

many grammar errors, commas' existence disappeared, and some plot holes, but other than that, I really enjoyed the story from its beginning to its ending.