I didn't one-star it, because it's free and because it didn't piss me off so much as just bore me. I didn't finish because nothing was happening, beyond the obvious, the dialogue was dreary, the descriptions of actions too detailed, progress in 'plot' too slow, and I wasn't really sure what there was to the story beyond the racial issues. Quality of writing was mediocre fan-fic style, which is to say I've read way worse.
There were some issues I had:
1. Larry has no time for anything, but also he is super ripped, because he goes to the gym a lot. When? I mean seriously, when? I'm too busy to go to the gym enough times to be ripped and I'm not a doctor who works crazy hours.
2. As I am white, I can't say whether Larry's situation is depicted believably, but I can say that if anybody spoke to me about my black (or any other race or sexual orientation) friends the way Brandon's friends speak to him, I'd be really bloody pissed. I don't know why he takes their racist comments so meekly. This seems unrealistic to me. He doesn't even reflect in his own head that they're being racist twatholes. I mean, what gives?
In the end, self-published stories usually have the advantage of being able to try out crazy scenarios and set ups, since no publisher is going to keep you from writing whatever the hell you like, so it's disappointing to read such a tame thing. If you like slow romances without plot, but plenty of relationship building and development, you might quite enjoy this, though. It just wasn't my cup of tea.