Another super story in this series but he needs to sort out getting it properly proofread or edited as there are WAY too many mistakes. I almost packed it in at one point and nearly wrote the rest of the instalments off altogether !! However, I really did like the story itself and stuck with it. He does need to up his game presentation-wise for book 3, though, for me.
I did chuckle at the 'Float On' mention remembering "Hi, my name is Larry" and how it always made me giggle. There were a lot of funny lines in it, though I dreaded him taking the humourous side of things too far.....
But those bloody mistakes.....water rain written instead of rainwater, we hear Bonner is dead but on the page before he was almost killed, sure quite and not quite sure, one minute he writes whisky then at other times it's whiskey, same goes for one guy's profession. One minute he's a warden and then morphs into the governor, of was used and not off. Roedean is not spelt Redean, he gave us tied and not tried and you and not your. Then "she never thought she would" should read "she thought she would never" to mean what he needs it to.
There were a LOT of words missed from sentences like he/up/the/from and then we get the added to a sentence needlessly on the same page he'd just dropped it from another sentence on !!
We had apostrophe mistakes and missing speechmarks and commas, too. He keeps missing the capitalisation for jag and wrote inquiries and not enquiries, so as you can see, there's a hell of a lot of tidying-up to do here. It did make the reading pretty arduous at times and that's not a good thing.