Limbo: A Very Short Story

by Shelley Hazen

Your past is a mystery. So is the present, for that matter. But a memory is haunting you -- a story of horror, blood, and death, where ghosts haunt you at every turn. Hell, you may even be one of them.

Where are you? You're in Limbo.

In this short piece of paranormal flash fiction, see how one misdeed can stay with you forever. The terror is free.

Genres: Short Stories

10 pages, Kindle Edition

First published December 6, 2015

Reviews

[TL *Humaning the Best She Can* · Rating 3 out of 5]

2.5 stars

I don't remember anything except being here. There is no before – only now.

These woods are familiar. Maybe I've been here as a boy. That notion feels right, but this place sure doesn't. The sky was never so white, the trees never the hasty smudges they are now. Clouds erase their tops, miles above my head. Snowflakes dust the air.

Would have benefited from being longer but not a bad story overall

[Melissa Chung · Rating 3 out of 5]

This is a 9 page short story. Seemed like 4 pages on my kindle. I thought it was okay. Not very telling as short stories go. One thing I find frustrating with short stories is you only get a glimpse of what the story is and it always seems to start off in the middle. Giving this story 2.5 stars. It wasn't awful, but I definitely NEEDED more.

We have a man in limbo like the title suggests. He sort of remembers that he had a name and he kind of remembers the people around him. However he is stuck in a loop of the same moment until he changes his actions. That is what I got from the story anyway.

That's it. I assume he is forced to live the same moment over and over until he fixes it.

[Brandon Roy · Rating 2 out of 5]

Not for me

The whole concept has been done and the writing style took me out of the story more often than than drew me in. I try not to be harsh but sometimes a story just doesn't hit. Maybe it will for you but for me it had too many things against it.

[bookishdoll · Rating 1 out of 5]

!!Free for kindle!!
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I'M CONFUSED

[Reanna · Rating 3 out of 5]

A short little ghost story that was actually quite good. I don't know if I can really say I love flash fiction because I'm greedy and always want more but as far as that category goes, this was a good little piece.

[Tucker · Rating 4 out of 5]

Good creepy flash fiction that packs a lot of themes into a few pages.

[✦BookishlyRichie✦ · Rating 4 out of 5]

I don't think I've ever read flash fiction before so this was fun for a first time. :)

[Kay Oliver · Rating 4 out of 5]

A flicker of horror

While immensely short, this story will give you chills. We all wonder what happens after death and this tale offers a haunting answer.

[Bluejayye · Rating 5 out of 5]

Another great short story by this author. I loved it.

[Thomas Jr. · Rating 4 out of 5]

Interesting.

Was quick, almost too quick, but I enjoyed it. Well put together. Has a very fluid, poetic beat to it. Very interested to check out more by the author.

[Anne (w/ an E) · Rating 5 out of 5]

Excellent flash fiction, IMO. There was enough story to make me think about the significance of everything that happens , especially about how decisions in life will affect us even after life.

[elias luna barrios · Rating 1 out of 5]

lousy book. awfully written and utmost weird.

[Arie Antonia · Rating 2 out of 5]

Ummm

This felt like i was just reading a bunch of words. I dnt know where the author was going with thia short story

[Diana Blick · Rating 4 out of 5]

Fairly good

Technically, this is well written and is without any superfluous decoration. It is taut and terse, and the author knows how to paint pictures with the fewest words necessary. All that being said, without the title I would have had no idea what was going on--another example of the story's terse style. However, for me, it lacked some substance and did not quite have the Saki-like impact that I think she was going for.

[Victarion · Rating 5 out of 5]

A chilling short, short tale.

This very short telling gives an intricate and chilling thought of questioning your past as if it is real or not, or if there's more to it than what we perceive human emotions.

[Edith · Rating 2 out of 5]

Very good.

While it was a little creepy, I really liked this short story. I feel like this could've made an amazing book if it wasn't limited to nine pages. But I still recommend this to everyone who is in the mood for something creepy and short.

[Christy · Rating 3 out of 5]

Oooooookaaaaay

Interesting, but a little weird. A person finds money in the woods and a dying man. He initially can't decide what to do... Take the money and leave the dying man or try to save his life....

[BookzBookzBookz · Rating 3 out of 5]

Review coming soon.

[Kyle Leonard Lawson · Rating 3 out of 5]

Good

Good work. Keeps you turning the pages. Interested in more detail and longer storylines next time. Overall a good read

[Regis · Rating 3 out of 5]

A quick read, with a strange and unique premise. I would very much have liked a bit more…

[Trinity Saleen Wood · Rating 3 out of 5]

this book is awesome!!!!!

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[Lanie · Rating 1 out of 5]

It might have been interesting.... If I had Any freaking clue what was happening. It was to confusing for me to understand, never mind enjoy what I read. :/

[Katie · Rating 2 out of 5]

I don't get it. Needs better development.

[Ahouse4biswas · Rating 3 out of 5]

While the protagonist was going through his de-ja-vu experience I myself was on a
vu-ja-de trip!!!

[Tanner Ashley · Rating 1 out of 5]

Boring and nonsense

Not really attracted the story. No building of thrill or horror. It suppose to surprise or shock. Nah it weak plot