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Take a minute , just sit right there while I walk you through how I made it through this 2nd trimester abortion of literature.
The book is broken down into three stories. Which I'll touch on each. One thing to note is that there is strong anti establishment, anti intellectualism and anti government rhetroic in all of them.
The first and undoubtedly most painful short story is, "family emergency excursion." The story immediately introduces you to not only 1, but a dozen(ish) characters in the first two pages. So and so was married to so and so who were cousins with so and so. It reads like duetoromney, and is about as thrilling.
The basic gist of the story is this extended family of rich doomsday preppers have to leave their homes and rally at a distant farm as the end times come. So it's a story about a journey. Like lord of the rings, but without any of the emotional connection to characters or depth. Or hero quest, or excitement. Okay so not like lord of the rings at all.
Fairly quickly the main character non chalently stabs a man in the heart. And no one else seems to really care. Seriously? No one is gonna comment from the family on how bad it's getting or why he did it? Just a quick chuckle and "no trouble I couldnt handle." Comment.
What kind of fucking sociopathic cultists are these people?
Anyway, we got two other short stories to get through. So I'll speed this up. So the family all links up in their vehicles and weapons and head through some rough country to the farm, witnessing some hungry folks, getting in some poorly written shoot outs and ending up at the farm. They get to the farm and no one died from their group, there was no sacrifice made.
The story suffers from telling instead of showing, and spends paragraphs detailing weapon types, calibers, truck carrying capacity and such. No one wants to read that the weapon was a .223 PDW and how one of the nameless characters doesnt like that caliber. It had no influence or relevance in the story at all. There wasnt a point where he ran out of ammo and had to scavenge some from a dead looter and it luckily fit his weapon. Its just boring needless gun talk. The same extends to Suzuki bikes and other stuff.
The grammar and editing is poor. (Teenager is spelled teen ager at one point. And the pacing is terrible. There is zero world building at all. The preppers are portrayed as heros without any flaws and those who dont are either idiots waiting to die, or enemies to be killed.
The first short story gets a solid 1/10 it's the worst of the three by far.
The second short story is surprisingly better than the first. But after wading through sewage, a trash can doesnt smell that bad.
The second story, "I'll have a beer thanks for asking." Follows the story of a laid off handy man who watches the end of the world begin from a bar. He quickly leaves, grabs supplies and heads to the hills to await the coming armageddon.
He then heads back to town, loots some stuff, helps some survivors out at a court house, and saves them from some raiders. In the end, no one important dies, good guys win.
A preppers stash is found and that of course saves the day. Young writes much better following one character around compared to multiple ones. Even if the character itself is confusing in some regards. He starts off as a gomer Pyle or forest Gump style idiot, but at the end is figuring out how to filter water with buckets and coffee filters. It's completely inconsistent.
But the world building is a bit better. Descriptions of broken stores, and looters help build a world where the first story did not. I cared a little for the fate of those in the courthouse. There is also significantly less needless descriptions of calibers or vehicle types. It's still present, but much reduced.
Probably the best of the three, a solid 2.5 out of 10. It's still trash, but it doesnt stink as bad.
The last is "dont bug me" a short story about a reporter sent to do two stories. One on s GMO lab and another on a group of preppers.
The labs lead scientist is pushed as an arrogant intellectual talking down to the reporter. Again Young suffers from telling us this (he literally says the main character felt talked down to) instead of showing us the arrogance through action or speech. He just told us. Lazy writing.
Of course these GMO creation is bad. Some modified bug that will eat pest bugs and save crops. Clearly GMOs =bad Is one of the themes of this short.
The reporter leaves, and visits coffee growing, tea sipping cultists(er preppers) at a local ranch. Who despite what the MSM (main stream media) says, preppers arnt bad!. Oh let's toss on some anti media sentiment in the mix too.
Yeah, you can see where this is going. The Bugs get out and cause a problem. The preppers and reporter have to move in and save the day from the terrible smart people and main stream media.
This would be good if it was written for a 9th grade creative writing course. Young continues to show a complete lack of ability to show any kind of pacing, or develop anything other than a surface connection to any of the characters. The majority of them have a depth of cardboard, with some maybe breaking into the wooden level. I never for once cared that the main character was locked in a closet, or the dopey janitor was mauled by bugs.
it's the most on the nose political rhetroic of the three. Preppers good, media and smart people bad. It still suffers from the over telling weapons spewing of the past. "Heres a glock 21 and a detailed description of how to load it, and a vest with 90 rounds on it." Ughh
I dont know, maybe a 1.75 out of 10? The fact that this book managed to get published makes me want to write again. Because if this shit can sell, damn near anything can.
It's bad folks. Real bad.