DNF but it pissed me off so bad here's my review: If you start a play with pages of notes explaining your formatting shorthand, perhaps it isn't good formatting shorthand. If you start a play with pages of notes explaining exactly how you would like the play's rhythm and tone to be, what the play is about, ET CETERA, perhaps you aren't doing very good playwriting! Like 75% of what he says in the notes we should be getting from the text itself. And it’s especially frustrating to read something where it seems like the playwright operates under the assumption that everyone but him is stupid. I especially love the part where he says he doesn't write for correct grammar but for the rhythm or the character or whatever. EVERY PLAYWRIGHT DOES THAT DIPSHIT. IT CAME FREE WITH YOUR FUCKING WRITING COMPELLING DIALOGUE. The landlord (& his wife to a lesser extent) sounded like Macy Rodman as Bianca Del Rio NOT HELPED by the constant italicization of the (other) F Word. What point does it make? Like what point are we making by all of this? That post vietnam america was homophobic? was misogynistic? I think we all know that! And the terry and brad scene in act 1 was so... Im assuming that the male lead in three's company was not also a queer man and Brad having feelings for Terry was not part of that pastiche. I could be wrong here. BUT. If we operate off of that assumption, then the Terry and Brad scene in act 1 was NOT GIVING. Like it literally reminded of all the shitty friends-to-lovers Homestuck PepsiCola fanfic I read when I was 14. It was not good. It was giving ao3 friends to lovers one-sided pining Hanahaki disease.
Two stars bc I respect experimenting with format and stylization