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204 pages, Kindle Edition
First published February 13, 2016
I really wish there was more character development in this story, I could have really clicked with Joy and Hawk if this book spent more time showing not telling, which made the character's feel surface level at times, like they were cardboard cutouts that were just pushed around the page. This made me sad because the story was cute as heck and I really liked the basics for both of the main characters. Since this is a character driven book it would stand to reason the character's should shine and while they glowed slightly with potential they never got the chance to shine.
Biggest pet peeve is that Hawk is only described in detail twice maybe three times in this book. We do have references to his body, hottness, and panty-melting looks a lot, but actual descriptions, not so much and the ones that are there are different. Page 8- "He's panty-melting hot thanks to his sandy dark hair..." One page later (Page 9) "He was tall, six-foot-two, and leanly muscled. His jet-black hair, cut into an elegantly messy style..." Then again on page 129- "His sandy dark hair had been combed." Do does he have black hair or dark blonde? Main character description continuity errors in this short a book with only three real descriptions is just lazy editing, not to mention the slew of missing or wrong words, like "her" being on the page instead "where". If it had only been a few instances it would have been fine, but it happened often and pulled me out of the story when I had to reread a line or try to figure out what was trying to be said.
Again, this wasn't horrible, it needed a lot of polishing and could have fleshed out the characters more if it was a little longer. By leaning into showing us Joy and Hawk instead of telling the reader everything it would have added a depth that lead to a better connection with the characters urging the reader to care about them.
The book was short and had a large portion of the end pages dedicated to another book/story (a spin off from this) and I just don't like that, what I bought was Joy and Hawk's story. What I got was the last 40ish pages of another book and that is not right. An excerpt of another book is generally expected.
My rating is a 2.5-2.75, I do recommend it if you want a simple, sweet story and can stand the errors.