This book started out pretty good. It has a cheesy 80s horror vibe to it, which I don’t mind at all, the MC was easy to sympathize with, and there were some genuinely creepy situations. A camera that takes bizarre pictures, including a man trying to crawl out of the photo? Black Masses held at a mysterious house far out in the woods? Count me in, this all sounds great.
After the 50% mark, everything went downhill—especially the quality of the writing. Another pass with an editor would have helped a lot. And the story got bogged down with some long, disjointed scenes—I almost DNF’ed after a ridiculous, PAGES long description of a raccoon dragging a severed limb from a dumpster across a road, getting flattened by a car halfway across, with the narrator’s voice appearing out of nowhere to announce, (paraphrasing here): Ladies and gentlemen, this poor mother raccoon was doomed to die, because of the cursed camera!
There was also a lot of pointlessly crude language describing the staff and patients at a mental hospital. The nurses were obese and cruel, with “massive rumps” and similar descriptions, and the patients were described as slobbering lunatics, including an old lady who went around saying she couldn’t find her vagina. Not only was the scene dumb, it detracted from any suspense that should have been building up as we approached the climax. Also, it just seemed immature.
And for the love of little green apples, I wish authors would research just a tiny bit before writing about health care systems. So many books describe chatty nurses just reaching for a chart and blurting out confidential information, or yeeting critically ill people on the street due to an unpaid balance while the hero works seven jobs a day to pay off grandma’s medical bills…and please just stop with this nonsense already. As someone who has worked in the field since 1997, these situations are just dumb.
In this book, the particular instance involved the MC calling the hospital looking for an employee, and a nurse just randomly tells him she doesn’t work there but she’s listed as a former patient’s emergency contact. HIPAA aside, that scenario simply couldn’t work. That’s a minor issue with the book, but please authors, don’t just wing it all the time. Realism in the real world stuff actually makes the paranormal parts more convincing.
The second half of the book was full of a lot of similarly bad writing, enough that I debated between one and two stars. But I went with two—three stars for the first half and one for the second half. It’s a shame, because the bones of a good story are here, if only it had been better written.