I generally love vampires, but I did not enjoy a single page of this bland book.
One good thing I can say about this self-published title, besides that the cover art is amazing: for the most part, the grammar is decent and there are minimal typing errors. The author is capable of writing some beautiful descriptions. Take, for example:
The quiet darkness was my lullaby, and I felt at peace amongst nature and the dead.
Or:
We are damned to spend eternity trapped in the icy shadow of the moon's ghostly light.
Sheer poetry!
But as for the rest… To sum it up, the characters are devoid of personality and the story lacks an actual plot.
This novel contains all my reading pet peeves. For starters, it is a contemporary story yet the main characters are given extremely uncommon or made-up names: Kathera, Aldréa. The vampires might be forgiven due to their age, except they’re just too weird…like Ve’tani.
My main dislike of this book is the characterization of its key players, or lack thereof. Since there is no actual plot to this book (save for pushing the leads into a baseless romantic relationship), the author’s one job was to make me like her characters and root for them, but that’s where this novel failed me.
These characters just don’t speak and act like real people would. If you’re minding your own business, like visiting your mother’s grave, and someone tells you to get lost or die, and physically puts their hands around your throat…no rational person is going to think, “I’m intrigued by that guy. I think I’ll go back to the cemetery late tomorrow night and see if he’ll attack me again.” A rational person would run away and call the police and avoid the area until it’s safe.
Then the vampire supposedly has no ties or interest in human affairs, but he’s intrigued by the main character because she stupidly places herself in the path of a self-proclaimed murderer. If he were a rational vampire, he would have either slaughtered her or vacated the premises just in case she were to tell anyone about him.
It just makes no sense. She only meets the guy 3 times and thinks he is the only person she could ever love. The first time, he attacked her in a cemetery without cause. Have you ever been to a cemetery? Unless it’s a private family plot (this isn’t), there’s plenty of room for two people to be there and never run into one another. The whole “meet cute” is ridiculous. The second time she sees him, she inexplicably feels inclined to tell him about her mean stepmom. (That’s a whole ’nother problem.) And the third time he can “smell another man” on her and tells her to stay away. At which point she has a total breakdown.
So I have to address this whole “evil stepmother” thing right now, because it is one of the worst things about this book. It’s a gaping, senseless plot hole if ever I did see one. It either needs to be expanded upon in reams or completely ripped from this novel and my vote is for the latter.
The main character is a tattoo shop artist. Her age isn’t stated. Judging by her behavior alone, I’d put her at barely 20. She’s implied to be a self-sufficient adult. She just doesn’t act like it. Her mother passed away and her father married an actual lunatic who poisons the main character’s dog and waves a gun in her face and beats her up. Yet she chooses to remain living with her dad and stepmom because she fears for her father’s life if he’s left alone with that woman. She never tries to do anything about the situation, though; she takes the punishment and then cries about her sad life. It doesn’t make sense. She could record this woman’s antics with a camera or cell phone, since her dad doesn’t believe her. She could call the cops when the woman pistol-whips her. She could just get her own place and leave them alone, since she’s the only one the woman is mistreating. There’s no rational justification for her taking it.
But she does, so I thought maybe this was a vampire version of Cinderella. Nope! As irritating as the main character’s constant whining about her sad situation is, it was even worse when she did extricate herself from it, because it made even less sense. This weird guy who tried to choke her, whom she decided she can’t live without, left her after knowing her for like three days and she thinks her life is over. So she moves out of her dad’s house because of that and goes to live with her boss-slash-boyfriend. Okay, so the murder of her dog didn’t make her want to leave, but being brokenhearted over a violent stranger dumping her is good enough reason? I’m not buying it.
In fact, I’m not sold on any facet of this story. The romance makes no sense. The main character makes no sense. The weird fling with her boss makes no sense. And as every fan of vampire lore knows, a vampire’s tale of being sired should be his most intimate, unique, and interesting thing about him…and this guy literally is running down a road and a woman just jumps him and turns him. There’s no tale of what went on for the years(?) he spent with her, how the deed was done, etc. Just…nothing.
Anyway, it ruins an entire book for me when its characters are that unbelievable and unlikable. Worst of all is the jumping back and forth in points-of-view, because the characters are too dull and flimsy to carry the weight of first-person narration. You need a strong voice to even attempt something like that, so doing so here was a very poor choice.
I had high hopes for this book because it started off by impressing me with the writing style, but the story itself was as dull and lifeless as a corpse and the author never convinced me to care about the characters or their relationship. I got 60% of the way through when a friend gave me some advice: life is too short to waste time on a bad book. I gave this one far more than its fair chance and it did nothing but disappoint, so I'm giving up on it.