I liked the Felicity, but couldn't figure out if she was black or dark as in tan. One minute she's described as having mocha skin, another time she's tanned. If she had been clearly black, I would've been impressed about the effort to diversify. As it's not clear, the writers' skill is poor imo.
I also liked Damien, but he was depicted as being so weak and scared, falling for the girl and then running away.
Other issues:
- Speed of light story and relationships.
- Worst example of instalove I've read: full-blown declarations and skipping out on getting to know each for sex, yet feeling like they're in love, ugh.
- The story was built around over-the-top reactions
- Taking advice from pop-up characters they have no reason to trust and don't question anything
- The world building was non-existant so I couldn't get a grasp of the world.
Even though the initial conflict is actually really good, it could have been explored so much better. Realistically, Damien's brother's should have disowned him and disappeared. They had NO chance to get to know Facility properly and yet trusted her straight away, even though Damien's instant love behavior was indicative of a spell. No wonder all their family died if that's how instantly they trust people!
Could have been better. Not reading on.