Running: RUN

by Shaheer Henderson

Running is a story based in the mid 1950's. In addition, it is a story about a man who leaves his house to get some materials to fix his roof. However, he ends up in a situation that will cause a series of events that will change his life and the lives of others forever.

5 pages, Kindle Edition

Published May 15, 2016

About the author

Shaheer Henderson was born to Rosemary Henderson in 1977. Born in Jersey City, I attended P.S #15 in grammar school, and I attended, "Henry Snyder High School" in 1994. In 1995 I moved to Bristol, VA where I graduated from Virginia High School in 1997. Fast forward to 2007 when I met my beautiful wife Jasmine Sanford who I would marry in 2012 and she bared 5 of our beautiful children. In addition, I returned to school in 2010 as a major in psychology which I hold a bachelor's degree. Psychological understandings of the world has always fascinated me. Thus, I always wanted to understand more about the human mind, and human behavior. As for writing I started writing poetry back in 1999, I started playing around with it and kept writing every since. Poetry has always opened apart of my mind to new understandings. In addition, it also lead to me writing my first short story and writing my first book. In 2006 I wrote my first book, buy I decided it was not sending the right message, so I stopped working on it. In 2012 I started working on my next book, and then I wrote 5 short stories (two which are on goodreads) and I am also working on three other books.

Reviews

[Dannie *migraine in 5..4..3..*]

Issues just on the sample as I wouldn't pay $1 for a 6 page story especially with first page the cover image:

1) Massive run ons abound.
2) Fragments are masquerading as sentences.
3) Punctuation is not anywhere near accurate.
4) The samale is a single paragraph by the way the author wrote it. To be done correctly, it should have been several paragraphs.
5) To go with punctuation issues, words are in quotes for no reason at all. For example, the word running when the character is literally running.
6) Editing was missed completely for example, "...there's is...".
7) Capitalization is missed in various places.
8) When writing prose, I find most go with having a character knock on the door rather than end a sentence without said action, possibly because the house just came into sight, to then add "(knock Knock)" sans the quotes. Sadly, that capital K is in the book just like it is here.
9) Different dialogues by different characters are separated by a single comma with no capital letters in either dialog.

The last "2" sentences of the sample should be example enough for pretty much every point. I am only calling this 2 sentences as the dialog punctuation seems to be ignored due to all the commas connecting them.

"Please someone help please someone", a man rushes to the door, "oh my god what's wrong sir?" , "please they are after me!". The man looks over his shoulder and sees 40 torches and they are closing in fast.

There are so many errors in the short sample alone, you get several per penny for a 6 page book. I wouldn't accept this mess for free, let alone pay for it.