I confess I had low expectations, but this actually isn’t bad. It’s too short to really be fully developed in any area, but it has some moments that had my attention.
The plot seemed a bit random and didn’t make the most sense, as in you never understand what peoples motivations are for their behaviors. The dialogue is just a bit stilted and unnatural at times, and there’s a little bit too much telling in a few spots.
But, I can also tell that there is some writing skill here, even if it needs a bit more polish. I think if this would have been expanded to 2-3 times this length to help build the world and develop the characters, and if it had just a bit more rewriting and editing, it would be even better. It’s all too abrupt for me, but at the same time I don’t completely dislike this overall, even though I am pointing out a lot of flaws.
It should be noted that I listened to the audiobook, and I thought the narrator did a good job.