Commendable First Effort, But Fails In Many Ways
"Sacred Planet: Book One of the Dominion Series," is a commendable effort by a new author. Unfortunately, it failed in many ways, that can be easily rectified in future works.
The short storyline has many moving parts: Many centuries in the future, millennia in fact, humanity has spread throughout the nearby arms of the Milky Way Galaxy. One arm is controlled by a somewhat puritanical mishmash of various religious sects in a Cromwellian parliamentary government, another by an ancient style of Persian/Roman ruler (one "Grand Lumis," many lords, lots of vassals, and even more mascara), a Earth-centric confederation based on religious tourism, and finally, the Voluntarist Network, an entrepreneurial based anarchy. Everyone is technologically advanced, peasants, serfs, indentured servitude abound, and everyone is at each other's throat.
A scavenger, maybe more "pirate-lite" crew happens upon a destroyed ship, rescue the one survivor, become involved in interstellar intrigue, and try to figure out how to make a profit from the rescue. The big super powers are moving towards open warfare, and the little powers are frantic to stay out of the way.
The writing is not up to the task of handling the main plot, and the great number of subplots in the narrative. There is so much going on, that it devolves to quantity over quality. Good narratives die of neglect. Characters who are the only ones remotely likable, appear too infrequently. A supporting character, who kills the love of his life, in order to get ahead, becomes a lead character, morose and annoying. The author also uses "...BANG...," "...BOOM...," "...CRACK...," with many other similar comic style utterances, to describe sounds during combat. The use of "...bulbous...," twice or more, indicates there must by some sort of eBook SciFi writers guild thesaurus making the rounds, as that word has appeared more and more, in numerous recent eBooks. Science is farcical, to wit: character has his descent "husk" destroyed prior to planetary entry from orbit. He grabs wreckage of the door, holds onto its plastic [sic] handles, and does a "dead reckoning" orbital insertion, "surfing" through atmosphere, to land close to his original target. Oh, he makes a river landing, no chutes, nor any type of retros, rockets, etc. Spoiler: he survives with just some "charring" of his lower armor. Really?
There is much to like about the attempts made in this eBook, but too much just makes it wholly indigestible. An thorough scrub, by a competent editor, would likely make it palatable .
Some readers may enjoy this eBook, and as such, it is a "neutral" recommendation. It was fully read via Kindle Unlimited.