Work harder Mike
As a burgeoning self published author who has a hand full of short stories on Amazon & iBooks I understand the challenges that indie publishing has. It's hard being a writer, especially when you don't have the support of a Publishing House. So I take my hat off to anyone who finishes a project and publishes it. So kudos to you, Mike, for that.
With that being said, if you're gonna charge people money for your art then you have to give them the best you can or nothing at all. At best, this should've cost a $1, and that just for the effort alone.
The plot was virtually none existent. A BASIC plot structure consist of 1.) a problem 2.) a complication(s) then 3.) Resolution. One can argue Chris' upbringing was the Problem, but for the story it seems more like Backstory, instead. There are NO Complications in the story. Chris is a prostitute but enjoys his life in relative ease with zero challenges from his patrons. Then without any provocation he meets his "Knight in Shining Armor". That part was everything needed to add Complication but then you ended it with him being murdered because of a totally forgettable incident from his past WITHOUT FORESHADOWING IT!!!! OMG!!!! Never ever include a punch like that without foreshadowing the damn incident. And just like that, he's murdered with no fight and climax from the protagonist, Chris. And I'm not even going to get into how you randomly changed perspectives in the middle of your story—smdh!
And the story has way too many editing & proofreading errors to cost $4. That's a cardinal egregious sin to make when you're charging that much for art—wrong, wrong, wrong!
Yes, this was a short story but A STORY nonetheless—there are still elements that makes a story what it is. I'm only being as critical because you're charging people way too much for this—not to mention the time that your readers will NEVER get back.
Mike, show some authorial integrity and lower the price for this. It's simply not worth what you're charging.
I wish you the best and despite my criticisms I think your effort is awesome and, no, I don't claim to be perfect or know it all. I'm just passionate about the craft as I try to hold myself to these same standards I'm measuring against you. Love you brother. Blessings.