A Round Of Therapy For Everyone
Wow, I don't even know what to say about this. Where do I even begin? The heroine is young and naive, and she goes to interview for a position as the hero's assistant. The hero is instantly taken with her.
SPOILERS
What the heroine does not realize is that she has hired on as the hero's f@$# buddy, as well as any other duties asked of her. She was supposed to discern this from the STD test she is required to take and from the vague wording of the paperwork she fills out. The heroine, let's call her C for Clueless, does not run screaming from the room at the STD test or even question it, like a normal woman would. This pretty much sets the theme for the rest of the story. C is not just naive, she is seriously TSTL, too stupid to live. As far as I can tell, any sense of self preservation is genetically absent from her body. Additionally, the plot is choppy and poorly connected. Dialogues make no sense. Yes, I get that there is supposed to be some sort of mystery involved, but you still need details to give the story any depth. And why is this woman doing a fainting goat routine? Three times, THREE times in a short story! And when she does faint/pass out, especially the first time, shouldn't the doctors have asked more questions, not just be, "Oh, you're awake. We can send you home now." To make that believable, you need to put in details that are what real doctors would say or do. Details create the setting and augment the storyline to help the reader feel the story. It does not have to be copious, just enough information to make this seem real. Also, a person shakes their head to say no, and they nod their head to say yes. Shaking one's head is not some universal gesture that means both. I am not sure why this keeps turning up in novels lately. Anyway, I could go on, but I won't. This was a total pass. Just no.