Great story, stilted writing
I've read a lot of Lozito, and I find myself really enjoying the plot and the characters, but getting hung up on the awkward writing.
In each book there's several instances of him using the same word within the same sentence, and there are a few inconsistencies. “By what RIGHT do you dare show mercy during the RITE?” (He could have easily used another word, or changed his phrasing)
Example, involving both of these, in the first book of the series, he describes a shower on the ship Athena as nothing more than a steam bath. However, in this book, he describes Zack as taking a shower where "hot water is cascading down his back" then shortly thereafter describes dirt as "cascading down the drain".
I feel his books and writing would greatly benefit from better editing, proofreading, and beta-ing in order to smooth out some of these problems. I read his second series, first. It still contains these same problems.
All in all, the plot is what draws me back to Lozito, but the awkward, stilted prose makes me have to take a break every so often.