I loved the first book in this series. It pulled me in right away with the opening action scene, then the conspiracy that followed, and everything after. It was also riddled with punctuation errors but this was a rare occasion where I was so interested in the story that I was willing to overlook the fact that it had never seen a proofreader or an editor.
But then this, the sequel. Take those same errors from the first book and throw in a heaping dose of over-wordiness, and it was just too much. There's a scene where a character goes out to a car to get a laptop. That went on for three pages when it could have been a single sentence, or maybe a paragraph if you wanted to throw in some thoughts along with the task.
Another scene involves asking a guy to do an illegal flight in his small plane. This went on for so many pages I didn't even count them. I just kept turning and turning until I was past the point where he agreed to do it and was given money. This book is an excellent example of one of the reasons why an editor can be vital to the health of a story. The author has lost perspective and apparently doesn't see that he's utterly killed the pace.
On the plus side, all of the dialogue is very real and believable. It's just not all necessary. Adding to the frustration is that there's an unresolved situation from the first book that I guess I'm not supposed to know about. I'm still waiting for the reappearance of the main character from the first book who was presumably killed.
As annoying as the errors were, and the slow pacing, it was eventually the wordiness that killed it for me. In fact, it was a single sentence that caused me to just close my Kindle and go do something else. It was something like, "He reached for his computer mouse and clicked an icon on his computer desktop." Really? I'm glad it was made clear that it wasn't some other moused that he grabbed and used to click on some other icon that wasn't on his desktop. I'm surprised the sentence didn't continue... "and caused a program to start up on his computer."
With some heavy editing, this story could be made into a worthy sequel to the really good first book in the series. I hope the author will go over the trilogy again, removing all of the filler and excess pages and pages that don't add to the story and turn it into the lean tiger that it could be rather than the fat lion that it currently is.