Another Fletcher novel I had to think on quite a bit before I could figure out how to rate it. Overall I liked the story, but it has so. many. issues. I settled on a rounded down 3, but it's definitely in the mid-3★ range.
Non-story factors that affected my decision:
⤷ Where on earth was the editor for this one? If it hasn't already been harped on enough in other reviews, this is rife with typos, homonym errors (often in the same sentence where the word would be in the correct form once, then incorrect the next time. I...wut?!), extra/missing words, and incorrect character names given for who is being described in some sections. There was even one baffling error which should have been the main character's name and there was a random nonsense name instead. It was really frustrating to be forced to go back or reread something 3+ times to figure out what the intended meaning is. I would just begin to enjoy the story again and be forced to retreat and decipher. More than a couple dozen times. I just. UGH. Anyone playing a drinking game to this would have died of alcohol poisoning before discovering them all. I accept that all indie-published works will have at least a few typos, but this was by far the worst I have encountered.
Some reviews conjecture this work was rushed out after a missed deadline. Based on evidence in the text, I suspect this is accurate. This looked and felt more like a first draft than the fully finished product. The editing ball was dropped. It's not polished.
⤷ Related: this book needed some serious trimming/editing of length. There are a lot of superfluous words just filling space (and someone got thesaurus happy and made a lot of odd word choices when it should have been kept simple). I suspect 25-30% could be trimmed out without loss of plot or meaning to the story. There's even one short, confusing portion of a chapter from the point of view of a previously-unknown character, adds nothing to the story, and confuses the rest of the chapter. The story line in this work is muddied at the best of times. Again, it felt like an early draft that was not given the polishing and time needed to make it shine.
Characters:
It always comes down to characters with me, doesn't it?
⤷ Sìne: let's get our heroine out of the way first, since this is usually the character that makes or breaks a story for me. For the first 75% of the book, I did not care for Sìne. At all. A lot of this is simply she's just too damn young (not to mention that math errors that gave me a headache while trying to puzzle out--how does a 21 year old have a 3 year old she gave birth to when she was 19? Another editing error? Was she supposed to be 22? Was there an earlier decision to have her be a younger mother but that part was flubbed up? Which is it?), and my patience for young characters is decreasing exponentially the older I get. I mostly avoid YA because Sullen Teens are not my bag. And Sìne is bratty. Incredibly sullen. Prone to drama. Knowingly acts like an asshole for the sake of it. Feels entitled to being met "halfway" even though she's nearly 100% in the wrong. Almost all interactions with Beowyn can be envisioned ending with her slamming her bedroom door while she shrieks that she hates him. She simply has a terrible personality... and I could not see the hidden strength or depth that is supposed to be there. That light never shone in a way that I could see.
Once the stupid (and pointlessly drawn out) relationship main conflict is sorted out, she's easier to deal with. She stops acting out so badly and mellows.
Her cynicism felt really icky and tacky at times. Her initial reason for going with Beowyn was... understandable but not admirable. Especially when she had zero intention of reciprocating. She's hard to like. Even more difficult to respect. I'm not sure how many times I can stress this. I probably could have forgiven her if she wasn't so dead set on grinding her heel into Beowyn's heart over and over. For most of the book. In increasingly cruel ways. It hurt to see a character who is usually so open and carefree repeatedly wounded after putting himself out there. To see him driven to jealousy--given how his species is--was heart breaking. If you're going to make a deal, keep up your end of it, girl.
Her Big Hurt backstory is so... boring and melodramatic to the point of eye rolling. One bad relationship over the duration of one year and she becomes a shriveled husk of a woman at 19 and locks herself away forever? The poverty she and Fergie were living in made for a more believable hurt than her ex. Her short life hadn't been amazing up until that point; most people's have not. I would have hoped all of the hurts and disappointments in her life would have taught her to be compassionate and kind--especially when hearts are involved. Instead she created and fostered resentments to justify her actions.
Her positives? Uh. Hmmm. She was a decent-ish friend to Lumen when she wasn't being petty and jealous. In fact, she made me like Lumen, who I previously disliked. That's how unlikable Sìne is. And she was able to love Éorik in a way that he deserved, which made me happy with her. And she managed to not totally bork things up as Great Lady for the whole day (?) she acted in that capacity. OK. And after she stopped creating reasons to be angry at Beowyn and accept their relationship (and got her way about a cultural issue she refused to accept. SIGH), she is a decent third in that triad.
Her insecurities are easy to sympathize with, even if maddening. I doubt many of us haven't been stuck with many of the same ones. Her inability to stop comparing herself to Lumen (or literally any member of Beowyn's 400 person harem) and making herself resentful and angry was believable. She could dig in and create a grudge where none previously existed.
⤷ Éorik: Oh, Éorik, you were my favorite character in Venomous, and I continue to love you in this book. Éorik was written with a nice balance of flaws and admirable traits. He's so breath-takingly loyal to both of his mates. (Not a spoiler, given the blurb chooses to reveal that tidbit.) The reason he could not previously make his big confession to Beowyn never really made sense. His willingness to sacrifice and make non-conventional decisions to try and make things easier for Sìne was admirable (even if those choices unintentionally made Sìne's resentments towards Beowyn deeper). His ability to love was so refreshing, and he was an interesting contrast to Sìne in this way.
⤷ Beowyn: Oh...Owyn. What happened to you in this book, buddy? You had some excellent one liners, and at times your carefree cockiness peeked out, but you spent so much of this book being a morose sad sack. You're also a terrible listener who takes too long to see the point, which was disappointing. You can understand and acknowledge someone else's point of view, even if you disagree with it. Don't be willfully obtuse and veer around the issue that was stated to you by every single other character in the story. How could you look in her face, see that pain, and not know that Éorik was going to pick up the pieces, and you'd be farther away from what you wanted than you started? I had hoped for some more depth to be given to Beowyn. He's still enjoyable after the angst is cleared up, but he felt unfinished. Why Sìne is never cleared up. What did you see in her? Especially with the repeated abuses aimed at him?
It was really interesting to see how Beowyn craves love, but he doesn't understand what it truly is and how to nurture it.
⤷ Lumen and her Ra: They're all back in this story, though only Lumen has any significant visibility. Her three mates are really background noise and convenient people to pass children along to or act as bodyguards when needed. I would have liked to have seen more of how those three are handling their adjustment to living with Lumen. Lumen is still...Lumen. She still makes impulsive decisions that blow up in her face, but compared to the train wreck that is Sìne, she seems downright mature. She still likes to meddle. Again, it often blows up with unintended consequences, but the girl really does try, doesn't she? It was hard to see her struggle with her mental health related to all of the continued Big Events directly connected to her abduction and rescue.
⤷ Clan Grae: these characters are all a delight and go a long way to saving the story. How could you not love them, their antics, and their willingness to embrace the unknown? To see them thrive on a new planet was satisfying. Weird Alien Custom? No problem. They accepted it and moved forward.
Plot:
As previously stated, the plot line to this book was muddied most of the time. It was lost in so many unnecessary words while creating relationship angst that would derail the story. It would peek in to say hello once in a while, get lost again, but the final 10% is where the plot line was found and stuck around. There isn't a lot of action plot to be had in ThunderClaw until the lead into the next book. And. Hooboy. Then it's a whirlwind and furious. Don't those Azteka Horde guys sound like real sweethearts?
This book read and felt like too many ideas without developing them fully. Again... this felt like a rougher version of the story than was intended.
So it seems like I really hated this book, eh? Did I like anything about it?
Themes:
Though still rough, ThunderClaw's strength lies in what it has to say about love (all kinds, not just romantic) and all it entails. Acceptance heavily played into this story. Can you love someone without accepting them? How do you get someone to accept and claim you? Why are we able to accept some people and not others? What personal prejudices and road blocks prevent us from accepting someone else? Why is our acceptance conditional for some but not for others? How much awful are you willing to accept and love someone regardless?
If you want to think about and chew on love, jealousy, loyalty, trust, family... all the ties that bind us... this is an interesting read, even in its disappointing form. It does also give one pause to consider the barriers we create and willful stubbornness, how we limit ourselves in the name of safety and protection.
The bones of this story are good; it wasn't fleshed out fully.