This book is a bit like a cake. It has all the right ingredients there; flour (interesting backstory), eggs (wide mix of characters), sugar (conflict between them). And from the description on the back I was looking forward to it.
However, this book/cake wasn’t left in the oven long enough, so came out a bit soggy and left me feeling unfilled and disappointed.
The initial premise starts off well. The Shadari live relatively peacefully on the edge of a desert, in the shadow of a mountain top temple, home to the Shadrari’s priests. However, their peace is broken by the arrival of the Nordlanders. They seize control of the Shadari, making them into a slave race, either as servants in the temple turned fortress or in the mines, extracting the magical ore the Nords use in the smelting of their swords. Now after decades of crushing rule, the Shadari rebellion is growing, with an uneasy alliance with the nomadic Nomas people, the Shadari have brought the help of the legendary mercenary ‘the Mongrel’ and think the time to overthrow their oppressors has come. Now characters from each side are thrown together in a mix of conflicts and compromises as the war starts.
This is essentially the best part of the book. The set up of the plot, and with the mix of cultures and characters you can think of all paths and turns it could take. But unfortunately, it starts to crumble pretty quick from the promising prologue.
The pace of the book is very rapid, jumping from character and location. I like the fact that the author doesn’t feel the need to layout and explain every detail, but there’s a limit to what the reader (i.e. me) can fill in the blanks and get some kind of handle on what’s going on. Plot points and explanations are either thinly explained or revealed too late in the story that you’ve been a bit irritated stuff has been going on where you have little clue what or why things are happening as they are. Little is also given in the descriptions of…well basically everything. While the Shadari and Nomas are (I believe) to be normal humans, the Nords meanwhile are from a cold climate and seem to be a race adapted to the cold. When they invaded the Shadari’s homeland, they were seen as being rotting zombie-like. They have a severe aversion to heat and the sun, where the try to avoid direct contact. But this is never made fully clear. This is just what I managed to glean from odd passages thrown here and there. While a touch from a Shadari can burn a Nord, that hasn’t stopped Eofar, elder son the ruling governor sleeping with Harotha, sister to the rebellion leader and getting her pregnant. I mean what are the rules? This kind of thing continues throughout the book. The Nords ride Triffons, flying creatures, but besides some mention of fur, there isn’t a description of what they look like. Do they sharp teeth? Claws? Colour? None of this is done. While I can create a mental picture if an author says dragon, these Triffons are the author’s creation. I don’t know what she envisages. It continues in more aspects of the story. Dramash, the young son of Faroth, the leading resistance fighter, has powers. And a prophecy. That are so ill-defined and revealed so late I was more confused than intrigued, and I can’t see, in the way it’s told, to have been the only one this confused. It doesn’t help either that Dramash is a highly irritating, unbelievable child. Early in the book, in the middle of an earthquake and rebellion attack, he is ‘willingly’ kidnapped by Frea, the evil daughter of the Nord governor and stays with her even when his aunt, Harotha tries to save him, because he really wants to look after the Triffons. Really? He’s about 7. Just came off as unrealistic and made him look like a spoiled selfish brat.
There are a ton of other instances where the story isn’t fleshed out where I was constantly flicking back and forth to see if I had missed something (most times I hadn’t). One of the main characters, ‘The Mongrel’; who helps kick off the Shadari rebellion, is brought in with a history of being a deadly mercenary. You’re not told this history, just that she’s a deadly mercenary. You get no explanation or backstory on the battles she’s fought and won. Just that she’s a badass. Thing is I got confused that I don’t think she actually did anything of note. Really. With the fanfare created around her, she didn’t seem particularly deadly or a supreme strategist. It is revealed she has some secret past linked with the ruling Shadari family, but like the rest of the revelations in this book, comes with no foreshadowing and just dumped in the middle of the book, that you’re surprised but in a bad way. Also, what really turned me off, was the death of a main character. I had to re-read the paragraph about three times, as its not made clear, they were alive l and seemingly fine just a few moments before, then we are told, not shown that they are dead. Now perhaps they aren’t really dead ad will come back in the later books, but after following this person for most of the book, and a pivotal character, to just have pretty much summed up ‘oh they’re dead’ and everything to carry on, really broke any positivity I had left in this book.
It also doesn’t help with the confusing mix of names. Ok, it’s a fantasy, so you aren’t going to get a Richard or a Susan, but the names seem too similar to each other and with many not getting a proper description; I got confused who was who, had to keep checking the character list and never felt a connection with the majority of them.
The writing is alright…mostly. Some parts are decent, but reading this really seemed to drag, not sure if it was just the whole confusing plot thing, or lacklustre writing or at times a mix of both.
From the blurb on the book, I was looking forward to reading this, a fantasy book away from usual dark grimdark fantasy I usually drawn to. While I don’t think it can be classed as a YA fantasy (because there aren’t enough of those) I think it missed something to be classed as a more mature title.
This is the first in a trilogy (how unusual), and after a poor experience reading this, I have doubts that I could be dragged back for the other two. Disappointing. I think the book’s ingredients should have been kept in the cooker for longer.