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Dan Granger
Fandom: Harry Potter
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Things didn't entirely get swept aside after the conclusion of the TWT. Dumbledore doesn't get his way. Riddle or Fudge won't either. Some OCs have large roles.
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Things didn't entirely get swept aside after the conclusion of the TWT. Dumbledore doesn't get his way. Riddle or Fudge won't either. Some OCs have large roles.
- GenresFan Fiction
489 pages, ebook
First published March 31, 2015
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June 18, 2021
This story is not Harry-centric; instead focussing on the adults around him. I was a bit wary of picking this up at all, as that’s not normally what I’m looking for in a story, but don’t regret it — this story was good, as expected of this author.
However, it suffers much more than I recall from bad spelling (most of it consistently, and most of it in names) and americanisms (they’re drinking Whisky, no ‘e’ in there, in Scotland). These are quite annoying. I don’t remember this normally good author being so bad at either; maybe not the usual beta and britpicker? Additionally, the author seems to forget it’s the mid-1990s so there’s no € yet.
Another weak point is names, asides from the spelling. The author assigns names to OCs and in-story characters that lack them, both first and last ones, but often forgets to say so before they are used, or uses only the first name (without specifying in-story who’s that first), made worse by using the same first name for multiple characters randomly, and quite differing from fanon in his assignments. This made it hard to follow at times.
Despite all that, I think it’s okay.
However, it suffers much more than I recall from bad spelling (most of it consistently, and most of it in names) and americanisms (they’re drinking Whisky, no ‘e’ in there, in Scotland). These are quite annoying. I don’t remember this normally good author being so bad at either; maybe not the usual beta and britpicker? Additionally, the author seems to forget it’s the mid-1990s so there’s no € yet.
Another weak point is names, asides from the spelling. The author assigns names to OCs and in-story characters that lack them, both first and last ones, but often forgets to say so before they are used, or uses only the first name (without specifying in-story who’s that first), made worse by using the same first name for multiple characters randomly, and quite differing from fanon in his assignments. This made it hard to follow at times.
Despite all that, I think it’s okay.
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December 6, 2023Harry was adopted by the Grangers a couple years before this story begins. Thoroughly-loathsome Draco escalates a public Slytherins-harassing-Hermione confrontation into a violent raid that leaves Mrs. Granger in a hopefully-temporary coma. Mr. Granger and his father-in-law (a squib, as it turns out, who would never have become distanced from his daughter's family if the threatened consequences for breaking the Statute of Secrecy weren't so severe) go Death Wish on the Death Eaters (with goblin collusion) over the next school year. The well-silenced WWII carbine they use is cool (do view the YouTube video mentioned in the author's note!); almost all the panicked wixen on-scene when Death Eaters show up and cause chaos, and even most of the DMLE investigators, never question that those particular wounds are from piercing hexes.
I can't decide exactly how I feel about this story overall; I actually diverted more than once to read another work with this sitting between chapters or scenes in an idle tab. I don't honestly object to sniping actual terrorists who were getting away with their crimes and recruiting more, but, well ...
♦︎ vengeful heads are rarely fun places to be (whether they're certain of their course or feeling the dark weight of their choices);
♦︎ there are a lot of casualties on both wixen sides (including some not just redshirts), yet sometimes the tone shifts too rapidly for me to your typical teen concerns (such as Harry getting to second base with Susan Bones); and
♦︎ although I appreciated seeing various adult British wixen opening their eyes to how insular and outdated they'd become under tunnel-visioned Dumbledummy's AND the "traditionalists"' (read: pureblood bigots') stagnation-quo agendas (the new Minister leading well-meaning-but-gullible "Ministry Muggle expert" Arthur Weasley down the right path to realize how little he really knew and understood was amusing and productive), I didn't always quite see what directly prompted a character (such as Amos Diggory) to diverge from canon attitudes.
There are some clever original moves, and some appealing ones, major and minor. I don't really mind Harry proving to be a magical powerhouse once his Voldyscar is no longer holding him back; he still has to figure things out.
The writing isn't bad (though the proofreading is imperfect), but it's not really rich enough to outweigh my meh reaction, and again the author's meant-to-be-light-relief meta scenes (down with the occasional author's note) are not a match for my sense of humor. I'm not going to read any more of his fics, at least for now, even if the concept sounds interesting, since it doesn't seem likely any will be true 4★ reads for me. Tbh, I've dropped Kevin Hearne and other polished, pro authors for similar, too-male-a-PoV reasons.
I can't decide exactly how I feel about this story overall; I actually diverted more than once to read another work with this sitting between chapters or scenes in an idle tab. I don't honestly object to sniping actual terrorists who were getting away with their crimes and recruiting more, but, well ...
♦︎ vengeful heads are rarely fun places to be (whether they're certain of their course or feeling the dark weight of their choices);
♦︎ there are a lot of casualties on both wixen sides (including some not just redshirts), yet sometimes the tone shifts too rapidly for me to your typical teen concerns (such as Harry getting to second base with Susan Bones); and
♦︎ although I appreciated seeing various adult British wixen opening their eyes to how insular and outdated they'd become under tunnel-visioned Dumbledummy's AND the "traditionalists"' (read: pureblood bigots') stagnation-quo agendas (the new Minister leading well-meaning-but-gullible "Ministry Muggle expert" Arthur Weasley down the right path to realize how little he really knew and understood was amusing and productive), I didn't always quite see what directly prompted a character (such as Amos Diggory) to diverge from canon attitudes.
There are some clever original moves, and some appealing ones, major and minor. I don't really mind Harry proving to be a magical powerhouse once his Voldyscar is no longer holding him back; he still has to figure things out.
The writing isn't bad (though the proofreading is imperfect), but it's not really rich enough to outweigh my meh reaction, and again the author's meant-to-be-light-relief meta scenes (down with the occasional author's note) are not a match for my sense of humor. I'm not going to read any more of his fics, at least for now, even if the concept sounds interesting, since it doesn't seem likely any will be true 4★ reads for me. Tbh, I've dropped Kevin Hearne and other polished, pro authors for similar, too-male-a-PoV reasons.
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