I finally returned to this series to read book three. Started last night, finished this morning. It's lovely to be back with Blake once more. Harrison is as cute as ever, too. And the mystery this time? Much, much more interesting than the last, in that it'll have you enthusiastically scratching your head (kind of like how I imagine Blake does.) I mean, the murder method is wacky - maybe even a little preposterous - but that's ok. In its silliness, it's exciting. I enjoyed it.
*Some spoilers up ahead. Watch out!*
In the previous installment, Confessional, I knew who the murderer was, and how they had done it, quite early on, but what I didn't figure out was why they did it. In Ripples, I knew who had done it, and could guess most of why they had done it, very early (more on this later) but I had no idea how. And I think I prefer it this way around, if I have to choose. I'm still hoping that the mysteries will become a little trickier to work out all around, though. I don't want to know who did it - not until the very end - but everybody is so obvious that I can't help but figure it out before the halfway point.
For the first time, I'm wondering if the writing is a little bit lazy.
Robert, if you're reading this, (and I hope you are! Reviews are important feedback, right?) then I want you to know that you have an invested, long term reader here. And I want to remain invested in you and in this series. But here's where we get serious.
I worry that you are squandering your talent and loveable characters. You slip into too many simple, sometimes problematic, cliches. (When a character fumbles with a key during an important event? Sorry. They're a suspect. When somebody has a physical disability? Sorry, it's done to death, they're a suspect. Wife of an ex-spouse? They're absolutely a suspect, if only because we are meant to resent them. The fact that all three were involved in the murder? Come on. Boring. Easy. Done. Also, something I've been meaning to say for a while. The untrustworthy bisexual ex partner cheating on you with the opposite sex? Another cliche I could have done without. The ex-partner appearing years later, their personality smarmy, rude, and arrogant, their open button shirt revealing curly chest hair, gross in its upfront sexuality? I'm sorry, man. It's done. It's boring. A snooze fest. Given Blake immense empathy, I would expect the flawed characters in his life to be a little better than this paper cut-out, nineties sit-com style character.)
Also, you are not proofreading for errors enough. A better proofreader would pick up on those cliches above, and also those errors that you keep missing. Perhaps you should enlist more help. Moreover, and I think this should come under proofreading, you had two characters use a racial slur early on - thankfully it didn't come up after those two uses - as if they didn't realise the mistake, and what the appropriate alternative term is. Please find those terms. Change them. It's one thing for an ignorant character to use them, setting up their ignorance of other cultures and peoples. It's another thing for an ignorant writer to do it.
Finally, you stretched my suspension of disbelief too far in the setup and it snapped. The whole thing with the landlady setting up Blake and Harrison? I'm sorry. It's stupid. It is. I nearly stopped reading there. There are a million ways you could have got Blake and Harrison to the hotel, and you chose the silliest - not the good kind of silly - way of doing it. The idea of this landlady shipping her tenant with some other guy so much that she pays for their trip away somewhere, the way it's all handled. It reeks of a first draft, placeholder scene that never got updated.
And breathe.
Once the story got going - really, from when the murder 'took place' - it became much stronger. Most of my issues are with the opening chapters. The good thing is that, this being the age of electronic reading, you can fix a lot of things post publication if you want. Please, please do go back and think over a couple of details and the general presentation or your prose. I love your work in this series, and like Blake and Harrison's relationship, I want that work to continue to grow deeper, stronger, sexier - who said that?!
Heh. This became a lot longer than I planned for it to be. Guess I had more to say than I realised.
All the best, Robert. To other readers, wondering if they should continue with the series: please do. The opening is weak but it becomes a lot better in time. And there's kissing. So there's that.
PS: I loved the last chapter. I knew /it/ was going to happen as soon as Harrison mentioned his wish for it - and I was really happy to actually see it take place. It was kind of a mockery of all of the seriousness of Blake and of the genre, and it worked for me. It worked a treat. More of that. Dare I say that it felt almost subversive? Oh, good heavens!