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Auroa: Book One: Paragon
The warriors guild was all Auroa had ever known until her destiny as a dragon rider had been revealed. Gift with years of training with the warriors guild, a loyal dragon, and a scholar of the dragon arts. When a fellow dragon rider betrays his own kind, She is thrown into a world of dangerous magic, power, and enemies around every corner. Every choice she makes could save or destroy her world.
This is book one of the Auroa short story series.
This is book one of the Auroa short story series.
27 pages, Kindle Edition
Published May 13, 2017
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May 26, 2017
So this was a free read I picked up on Amazon. I'm not sure if it was a promotion or not so if you are interested I would check it out soon. There were some major issues with this short story and I question if it really did go through some sort of editing. I will be splitting this review up into two parts to be fair to the author
(1) the story itself
(2) the problems I have with it
The story itself:
So it starts out with the main character Auroa who is out on quests and filling her venture card up so she can move up in her guild training. She suddenly becomes a dragon rider and is training with her dragon when all hell breaks loose. This is a short story designed to come out in a smaller series, I believe. There really is little information on the author or his plans with this tale.
Overall, I was enthralled by the world that Kyle Brown has created and will continue reading on when the next in the series is out. Is was a quick read so there isn't much to review other than the characters. Auroa was a likable character and seems to be super lucky in this story. Maybe it's fate (perhap explained in next book) but she suddenly finds a dragon and is lucky enough not to find herself in the middle of the hell breaking loose. The little dragon, Paragon, seems too wise considering how long he has actually been alive ( a few days). I could use some more character development there.
The problems:
Okay, so as an aspiring writer I know that the worst part of writing can be the editing part. Yet, I also would never turn out work that I have not at least attempted to edit at least once. I am not sure if that is the case with this short story but it desperately needs some editing. From poor verb congregations, misused words, to missing words I found myself wanting to send an edited version back to the author. And I hate editing!
Some examples:
"You are the one I picked as my rider. Side you are branded with my mark."
she instead of see
threatened vs threated
Another thing that irked me was how something just didn't make sense.
- I could be wrong but I am pretty sure ash is not crunchy. Embers maybe but not ash. And how can one tree exploding create so much ash?
- I just cannot see why he would give her all that information with his dying breath.
Again, I understand how tedious it can be to edit your own work but at least read it out loud to yourself once to catch the misspelled or misused words. That is the least you owe your readers, out of respect.
The rating:
So this was hard for me because I liked the world building and the tale itself but I could not in all honesty give it more than 2 stars because of the editing mistakes.
(1) the story itself
(2) the problems I have with it
The story itself:
So it starts out with the main character Auroa who is out on quests and filling her venture card up so she can move up in her guild training. She suddenly becomes a dragon rider and is training with her dragon when all hell breaks loose. This is a short story designed to come out in a smaller series, I believe. There really is little information on the author or his plans with this tale.
Overall, I was enthralled by the world that Kyle Brown has created and will continue reading on when the next in the series is out. Is was a quick read so there isn't much to review other than the characters. Auroa was a likable character and seems to be super lucky in this story. Maybe it's fate (perhap explained in next book) but she suddenly finds a dragon and is lucky enough not to find herself in the middle of the hell breaking loose. The little dragon, Paragon, seems too wise considering how long he has actually been alive ( a few days). I could use some more character development there.
The problems:
Okay, so as an aspiring writer I know that the worst part of writing can be the editing part. Yet, I also would never turn out work that I have not at least attempted to edit at least once. I am not sure if that is the case with this short story but it desperately needs some editing. From poor verb congregations, misused words, to missing words I found myself wanting to send an edited version back to the author. And I hate editing!
Some examples:
"You are the one I picked as my rider. Side you are branded with my mark."
she instead of see
threatened vs threated
Another thing that irked me was how something just didn't make sense.
"The ash crunched under Auroa's boots as she walked."
- I could be wrong but I am pretty sure ash is not crunchy. Embers maybe but not ash. And how can one tree exploding create so much ash?
"I don't have much time left Auroa... [but let me give you a little history with my dying breath] ... started all this because I wouldn't grant him ... Go find the dwarven city of Throa. It is located under the mountain of Throtoss named after their god."
- I just cannot see why he would give her all that information with his dying breath.
Again, I understand how tedious it can be to edit your own work but at least read it out loud to yourself once to catch the misspelled or misused words. That is the least you owe your readers, out of respect.
The rating:
So this was hard for me because I liked the world building and the tale itself but I could not in all honesty give it more than 2 stars because of the editing mistakes.
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