I loved the rhyming!
I didn’t expect Comet’s injury to have come from an elf fight, and getting punched!
I love the way Comet was looking at the rookie who took his spot on Santa’s sleigh. His eyes were narrowed and Freddy was looking eager to be there.
‘As Comet jumped up,
Doc said with a frown,
You’re not going anywhere.
Just sit yourself down.
No dashing, no dancing,
your arm, it needs fixin’.
It will be a long time
before you’re prancing with Vixen.”
‘It’s so very quiet
when the elves all go home
and you’re a busted-up reindeer
at the North Pole alone.’
-Comet trying to lift the bag of toys with his arm in a cast was comical.
Comet was so touched the boy said not to put the reindeer out, because no one ever thinks of them over themselves.
‘He lumbered outside and prepared to depart when he heard the soft sound of a hernia start.”
Ugh…
‘Way out at sea,
near the end of his race,
a whale blew his nose
right in Comet’s face.
That was all he could take;
Comet felt he was through.
But just then Hawaii
came into his view.’
Haha!
He finally finds the house in Hawaii.
He asks for a raise, and Santa tells him to take a vacation too, and he asks for one for the elves.
I couldn’t believe the elves didn’t even apologize for punching comet and breaking his arm. They didn’t help deliver the toys either! I thought for sure comet would get them to help.
“We’ll all go!” laughed Santa. “That should heal that bone!”
“Oh, and next time,” said Comet, “please turn up your phone.”
This was so cute!! I love rhyming text, and these rhymes were good. The story didn’t go how I thought it would, but it was cute, a nice ending.
What didn’t make sense is that Santa didn’t come back when he realized he didn’t have his bag of presents. You would realize that immediately or at least at the first house you stopped at. Yet Santa doesn’t call until Comet is at the last house of the night, to deliver the pig on a bike to the little girl and Santa calls their house, somehow knowing Comet is there. It’s the end of the night!! What has Santa and the reindeer been doing?! But this is all just a plot device to set up Comet delivering all the gifts and doesn’t make sense.
It would have been better if comet had at least had help from the elves. Or if Santa had gotten his bag and only left behind the pig on a bike toy and comet only had to deliver that one. I think that would have been a better story.
Seems like they should be able to pinpoint an exact house where children live, instead of literally flying all over the world. But that’s part of the plot also so we can have this story.