New Moon Rising (Samantha Moon Origins, #1)
by J.R. Rain
Spoilers Warning: If you are starting your Samantha Moon journey with this book, rather than with Moon Dance, there are spoilers. If you aren't, well then the spoilers will not be news to you, will they?
Second -- I read this on my Kindle, so I'll be giving locations, rather than page numbers.
I'm going to start out by saying I was very disappointed in this book. I'm a big Samantha Moon fan, but have found that most of the 'fan fiction' in the Samantha Moon World is, in my opinion (yours may vary), crap. Sorry. It could be because it diverts too much from Sam's series life, creating chasms between the penultimate Samantha Moon of Rain and the watered down, sent on some time-traveling adventure, etc., etc., Sam of the fan fiction World. Now, this book didn't do that, too much. It explores how she became the "Vampire for Hire," but it does so, again in my opinion, clumsily. First, it is filled with prescience (and, yes, the author(s) use that very word -- too bad it isn't used correctly in the novel). The following is my rundown of eye-rolling, predictable, prescience.
At 201 on my Kindle, speaking in regard to Tammy, who is, in this novel, only 4 years old: "She'd trust the Devil himself if he said hello." Really? After the last two entries in the real Moon series this was just too predictable. There is a similar comment in regards to both children at 3484, when she is talking to her children after returning from the hospital: "I'd move Heaven and Earth for you both, and I won't let anything hurt you. Even if the Devil himself tried to take you, I'd punch him in his pointy nose." Not only too precious considering the last two Vampire for Hire novels, but the exact same wording: the Devil himself. For one, Sam doesn't believe in Heaven and Hell or in God, angels or devils (of the preternatural kind), so having her so focused on them (oh, yes -- there are more coming) isn't reasonable at this stage in her life. Even Danny comments on that at the same location.
At 513, I jotted down in my notes that perhaps those of us whom have read the original series shouldn't read this one, as it adds nothing to the store of knowledge we already have gained in that series, and the result is a lot of eye-rolling. What brought on that note was this thought of Sam's: 'What am I saying? Psychics? That's no more real than witchcraft.'
And there is a whole lot of reference to preternaturals that just seems forced, too prophetic, etc. At 1403, as Sam and her partner, Chad, are investigating a possible HUD fraud: 'I'm sure I woke her up. Great, she's some kind of vampire sleeping in the middle of the day.' and just a bit later at 1433, Chad says to Sam: "We only go around once. You can't spend your time here stumbling through existence like a dead woman." To which, I replied, out loud in what I imagine as Sam's voice, "Hold my beer." Her actual response included this: "...a little grease won't kill me." No. No it won't.
That's not the only vampire reference. At 1471 she thinks 'Yeah, I kinda have a garlic addiction. Vampires beware." SMH And at, 3228, her co-worker, Bryce Anders, makes the only reasonable vampire reference, when, after her attack, he visits her in the hospital and says "Maybe you got attacked by a vampire?" To that remark, which was coincidentally the truth, Chad rolled his eyes and another co-worker, Michelle, punches him in the arm. He responds with (at 3230) "Not saying a literal vampire. Some freako that thinks he's one." In this same area, the co-worker, Ernie Montoya, mentions a case in New York in 1970, and although I can't put a date on it to be sure, I assume this was a reference to Fang.
Other supernatural entities get space, too. At 1688, Samantha is at her desk at work, thinking about a case 'while making zombie faces at the ceiling.'
And angels-- there is a lot of reference to guardian angels for someone who doesn't believe in the trappings of most religions.
At 1529 Sam says "There's no such thing as guardian angels." The mention of a guardian angel appears again at 2017, 3147, 3215, and 3530.
And besides the author(s) over-the-top depictions of how perfect Sam and Danny's relationship is, a zinger of prescience is contained in this sentence at 3491, after Sam has returned home from the hospital after the attack: 'Whatever happened, I'm sure it's nothing we won't be able to cope with.' Ya think?
There were things about her stay in the hospital that were unrealistic, but probably the one that sticks out most to me is the nurse's surprise at the scant amount of urine in Sam's collection bag from her catheter. Let's see, she was in a coma for two days and then a couple of more days in the hospital after that. Had no one checked her collection bag up to that time? It would have been so full that urine would be backing up into her bladder through the catheter. Gross medical malpractice there. And one would think with the so called 'miraculous' healing of her neck wound, her low heart rate, her sun sensitivity, and etc., etc., etc., that the physicians might have wanted to keep her around a bit longer for study.
So, yes, the book is full of prescience and the regurgitating of things we already know from the original series. The only place that word is actually used, is at 3086: 'That moment comes back to my thoughts, and in the prescience of calm, I recall the pressure of human fingers digging into my shoulder and side.' Um. Prescience is the knowing of something BEFORE it takes place, not the remembering of it after the fact.
And I noted a couple of other proofing errors, nothing too substantial, at 2063 and 2523.
On a personal note, I was a more than just a bit offended by Sam's depiction of a young woman from Indiana. Having been born, raised, and lived in Indiana my entire 70 years, I can tell you that Indiana's young women, for the most part, are not clueless lambs for leading to the slaughter. And, yes, Sam, Indiana residents do have an accent, as does most everyone who lives in a specific area of the country. Certainly the speech patterns of those from the northeast are different from those from the northwest, and those from the south are different from those from the north. The Midwestern twang of those from the breadbasket states of America are identifiable, and many of those people are often well-dressed, well-educated, and street smart too boot. And, yes, Sam, yes, the people in Indiana do sometimes say "that's swell." Sheesh.
So was there anything about the novel I liked? Not much. Because the plot is one that is already known, I can't give the author(s) any points for that. But the flow was good, the characterizations of everyone except perhaps Sam herself (!) were good and consistent with the characters of the Vampire for Hire series (and no, I don't buy that she would be so different pre and post attack). The attack scene was done reasonably well, and the scene with the onyx cell, which I assume was metaphor for Elizabeth, Sam's dark other, entering her body, was also interesting and well done. The descriptions of terror in the woods (first instance), in her home, and her sister's account of the same in her home, were all consistent and well done. And, of course, I was happy to see what must have been the beginning of Sam's addiction to Judge Judy at 706. I also liked the last line of the novel, spoken by Sam when she watches her image in the mirror fade to nothing: "Well," I deadpan. "This isn't normal."
The other thing that made me smile I'm sure was unintended by the author(s). At 1968, where Danny is talking about his partner, Jeff, Sam indicates he alludes to "Jeff's flakiness." Yes, that made me laugh. Jeff Flake has been flakey for some time. Just ask his Arizona constituents.
So, no, I won't be reading the second book in the series that recently was released. First, this one was a disappointment. Second, it told me nothing much that I didn't already know. And third and most importantly, it leaves off basically where "Moon Dance" started. All that would be left to explore would be the deterioration of Sam's marriage and the affect of her new preternatural state on those around her. Why do I need to read about that? I've heard about and seen the results of that in the original series.
Reading this supposed co-authorship hits me much like some co-authored fiction I've read where one of the authors was James Patterson. The name is there for looks (and marketing) only. I saw very little in this book that smacked of the writing of J.R. Rain. Here's my advice to the authors: to J.R. Rain -- worry about your Vampire for Hire series and stop messing around with fan fiction. To Matthew S. Cox -- make up your own characters and stories and write your own series which is not dependent on another author's work. Or pick up a character who isn't one of the main characters from the Vampire for Hire series and content yourself with fan fiction forever. If you have writing talent, which I think you do have, you are wasting it here.