This book bothered me so much, I was just like, rolling my eyes and sighing frustratedly every few minutes. Ugh. Okay, so this'll probably be more of a rant than a review, but whatev.
Characters: 4/10
Okay, so, first we have this Max person, who's gonna save the world (and you know it!) and who's also, y'know, 13, and the author makes him act like he's 30. I mean, honestly. I hate authors who write children like adults. Interestingly, these writers are almost always adults. (That's why I enjoyed the Outsiders more, I guess.)
And then he's like all compassionate- with no boundaries. Pfft. Within the range of human emotion there's always boundaries. And if there's not, it should be looked upon as a "neutral" trait- not a strength or weakness, because whether it is one of those depends entirely on the situation the person's in (writing and plot wise, of course).
And don't even get me started on- Okay, so he is basically subverting the stereotype that "adults don't trust their lives with little children"- but it's happened so much that it's simply ridiculous. What is he, a martyr? A hero? Okay, so... but you're putting your life on the line based on some myths? Heck, how brainless and unmolded by the world is this society? He could be a sociopath for all you know, and just act nice on the outside. Max is not particularly smart either- at the end of the book, I feel he could've gone over to Astaroth's side and kinda spied for the Rowan people, which gives him a huge advantage when the Big Battle comes, 'cos Astaroth would fight against him with th bias that Max once worked for him, and the betrayal would be like sweet revenge for all that Mr. Sikes did.
But no... everyone likes him. Even The Guys Want Him.
...Gary Stu, anyone?
David is a little better written, but not by much. He IS much more likeable, though.
Almost everyone and everything else is just plain ole archetypes of fantasy fiction. Like witches being old and all that. I mean, they're sort of different, but they're still old, and that's the longest-standing witch stereotype there is.
(He should take writing lessons from Terry Pratchett. ^^)
One thing I enjoyed, though, was Astaroth. Never mind that his name was synonymous with the devil (hey- maybe that's why he turned bad!). Simply, the Orochimaru likeness was startling. Black hair, creepy eyes... HELLO?! Oh yeah, and pedophiliac tendencies.
Orochimaru: For the last time, I AM NOT MICHAEL JACKSON'S BROTHER!
Anyway...
In terms of character development, I would say Dr. Rasmussen is the winner. Yeah, sad, I know.
Plot/Pacing: 6/10
I was surprised by how many catastrophes there were in this book. I mean, really. It's like he doesn't even care what happens to his characters (see below). It's fine to throw in a couple MEANINGUFUL deaths/bad things, but he just makes the book look like the Great Plot Melting Pot. Oops, bad pun. ^^'
And then he has a case of They Won't Stay Dead Syndrome, where he presses the Die button and later (hastily) presses the Revive button. Examples: Cooper, multiple times. Ms. Richter. And that old guy, what's his name. Even his mother dying wasn't enough to redeem the emotional aspect of the book, and I usually break down pretty easily. I don't know, it just seemed too.. Idealistic? No... it just didn't have a personal feel to it. It was his life, and I had nothing to empathize with.
The Sidh part was really weird, too. If I was a free-thinking individial latched to the upward spires of reality, I would probably think I'd gone insane. I mean, c'mon. Sailing through the sky, getting out of the atmosphere, going through deep space (which has no air if you don't remember, it's one huge vacuum).. I have no idea what happened. Magic is magic, but it also has to make sense. Did they sail into the moon, or what? And then it's like a version of Alice in Wonderland, or whatever.
(Not to mention the-supposedly- large amount of character development he went through there... which took a total of 2 pages to get through. Yeah, training's pretty easy for our hero.)
The ending surprised me too, and not in a good way. Heck, Neff's gonna have one big mess to clean up in the third book, and I hope it wouldn't be as cheesy as the conclusions to most fantasy series- aka, Good Defeats Evil, Everyone is Happy, Thanks to Our Hero.
Writing Style: 4/10
Oh. My. Gawd. Neff doesn't have enough of a voice to entertain a cockroach. He says what happens. That's all. There's no sign that he's enjoying this- in fact, during several parts it positively felt like he hated writing this part of the book- LITERALLY. Not because some character was dying. He just didn't want to write it.
There are pwetty phrases here and there- "opiate of water" and such. But it's like he's using a fancy verb for everything the characters do, instead of tellin' it like it is. Maybe that's just a personal preference though, I don't know. I'm too used to pTerry's wonderful writing to get used to this kind of hardcore fantasy, I guess.
His lack of introspection also made me feel like no one was feeling anything, especially Max. Look, you've got third-person perspective- MILK IT FOR ALL IT'S WORTH. Even Rowling managaes to make Harry sound believable- Here, he sometimes doesn't even give the basic details of what he's feeling. Show, not Tell, sure... but Tell sometimes too! Story TELLER, remember? This is not a screenplay!
I sometimes say too much of a writing voice is bad... I'm scratchin' that now.
Overall: 4/10
Pure fantasy, nothing deep. It frustrated me, an omnivorous reader, very much... but maybe that's because I've read great classics like 1984 and Lord of the Flies. Heh, I wonder how well Max would do against pure, human savagery... .