Wisp

by Paul Willis

He looked at his arms now. They were thin and fragile. It was a sign of age, the frailty expected with time. Young people weren’t supposed to be that weak.

Their days with her were the golden age. They called her Wisp.

A very short story. (Approximately 8 minutes reading time.)

Genres: Contemporary, Short Stories, Christian Fiction

9 pages, Kindle Edition

Published December 27, 2017

About the author

Paul Willis is an average guy seeking to glorify God. He is a homeschool graduate and happy about it. He will always be learning the crafts of writing and independent publishing. He is picky about what he writes—it must be comedic or meaningful, and above all, it must be clean.

Reviews

[R.A.]

Awww, this story was so sweet and wonderful! I apsolutely loved it! <3 A great little story to read on the train heading to Edinburgh!

[Paul Willis]

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[Angela R. Watts]

This was quite a beautiful little read and I got teary eyed. Powerful message.

[Paige Runyan]

So good! It completely pulled me in!

[Perry]

This short story is so sweet. Very full of emotion and beautiful prose.

[Sarah Grace Grzy]

A very sweet and heartwarming story. Little Wisp totally captures your heart, as does that gorgeous cover.

I found the flashbacks rather confusing, as there wasn't much differentiation between present day and the man's memories. I had to keep stopping and backtracking to determine what time I was in. There were also a few typos that pulled me out of the story, but those were my only complaints.

All in all, very poignant!

[Angie Thompson]

I got a little lost at times with the back and forth between past and present, but the ending made me cry. Put that together with my rating, and you'll have an idea of how good it was. Very powerful and poignant short story!

4.5 stars

Content--mentions of deaths

[C.B. Cook]

This was such a sweet short story, and I'm so glad I finally got a chance to read it! It's a very quick read, but in spite of that, I was able to connect with the characters. It was also very thought provoking! I have yet to be disappointed by any of Paul Willis' stories!

(This is actually a surprisingly coherent review for having been written at 5 in the morning...)

[Hanna]

For being so short, this was so sweet. Though there were few details (how old was the main character? Why were he and the girl sick? Some questions are left unanswered), it kept the story simple, and didn't lack because of it. The Christian element was done exceptionally well; I really liked the verse.

My complaint was that the memories were often difficult to distinguish from the reality. Since I felt most of the story was a memory, though, it wasn't as bad as it could have been.

[Bethany Willcock]

This little story was so sweet and heartwarming and sad and touching all rolled into one! I was nearly crying at times, but it has excellent lessons and a great Christian message. Highly recommended to just about anyone and everyone!

[Rebekah Morris]

This is more of a vignette not a short story since it was so short and had more emotions than plot. But it still had a good message and was well written.

[Karis]

Beautiful and sweet!

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I did not even know this existed until now. :O

[Abigail Harris]

Wonderful and sad story with a strong message.

[Lydia Willcock]

I don't usually enjoy such sad stories, but I did enjoy this one. It was solemn, but touching. My only complaint was that the transitions between present and past got a little confusing a few times - a gap between paragraphs would have easily solved this - but other than that, it was a very sweet little story with a good lesson.