I really wanted to like this book, because the premise sounded good and the world introduced in the first couple chapters was interesting (potentially interesting magic system and culture), and I was prepared to cut it a lot of slack, being from an independent publisher and all. The first half of the book was pretty good, all things considered. The writing wasn’t great, but still, the story was good. I wasn’t even put off by the “modern” style dialogue that I saw complaints of in reviews; not all characters in high fantasy have to talk like Gandalf, after all. But then the story just got stupid, the characters got stupid, and I ended up having to skim the last third of the book because I just couldn’t take it anymore.
My biggest complaint through of the book as a whole was that Kael is supposed to be this fierce and feared warlord, yet it boggles the mind how he got this reputation. We’re told over and over that everyone’s afraid and/or in awe of him, that he has this incredible reputation as a bloodthirsty warrior, etc. But it makes no sense. Yes, his reputation is very exaggerated, and bears little resemblance to the “real” person, but there is nothing to show how he got this reputation (that he apparently really likes). The “real” Kael is gentle, humble, rescues slaves and horses from being beaten and is basically an all-around perfect guy. He explains several times that his public persona is all a show, but we don’t ever get to see his public persona or his interactions with people other than those closest to him, except for a few scenes when he’s riding through the streets looking stern. There is never any interaction with a character that doesn’t know him personally, except for maybe Eirenn, and even then, Kael treats him jokingly, seemingly not even trying to maintain his reputation. There is absolutely nothing in the book that shows how he acquired or maintains his fearsome reputation. Maybe that wouldn’t have been so bad if he hadn’t been portrayed as such a gentle, humble, even awkward and bumbling at times, nice guy. He claims he rules his feudal lands fairly but sternly, but again, no evidence of that. He doesn’t seem to do any sort of ruling at all, except for one day of assizes-type hearings in midwinter in a town a day’s sled ride away, that’s almost completely skimmed over except for one case that shows off how much better Kael is than every other man in that world for having a decidedly modern and feminist attitude. The disconnect between what we are told and what we are shown is so great as to make it completely unbelievable. In fact, Kael reminded me of nothing so much as Captain Malcolm Reynolds from Firefly, and, while Mal may be handy in a fight, I absolutely cannot picture him as a fearsome warlord with a bloodthirsty reputation. Maybe if he hired a good marketing firm and a brilliant PR person, but nothing short of that.
And then there’s Kael’s and Ishtaer’s relationship, which was described in positive reviews as a “slow burn.” But there was little romantic about it. Kael is alternately hot and cold towards her, until he finally decides he’s in love with her, and then he goes about acting like an awkward, love-sick teenage boy. Ishtaer … well I couldn’t ever really figure out what Ishtaer thought exactly. She can’t make up her mind at all, which I suppose isn’t surprising given her ridiculously tragic backstory, but she comes across as pathetic more than sympathetic. They both overreact multiple times to things the other does and says, and it just gets annoying after a while.
Overall, there just wasn’t any depth to the story. No delving into characters, the world’s history, the magic system, nothing. The word that comes to mind thinking back over it is, “superficial.” It was quick, but not in a good way. Not in a fast-paced story way. Scenes were short, with just enough dialogue and a bit of narrative to move on to the next scene. Now, I know not all books can be epics like Lord of the Rings, or Brandon Sanderson’s fantasy tomes that he warns not to drop on small pets, but this story could have been fleshed out far more without coming anywhere near Wheel of Time proportions.
Plus (and this isn’t really the book’s fault) somewhere I read this book’s love scenes described as “fade to black.” Nope. They’re not as nearly as graphic as some, but it’s certainly not fade to black.
Long story short – potentially good story idea ruined by bad writing. Not terrible writing, but just not good enough. I feel like this plot in the hands of someone like Brandon Sanderson or Jim Butcher could have been incredible. As it is, I wish I could forget I’d ever read it.