There was nothing really special about this story. I get this was a short story but it moved a little too quickly for my liking. It's like Shanelle arrives at the palace with no clue why she's there, even though there are tons of other females with her. Her and Malik meet and she finds out what's going on. They argue, have sex....and in the end get married. The end.
Questions/Comments:
What year was this suppose to be taking place in?
When Shanelle is sneaking around, she's trying to get away but ends up heading towards the ballroom right? Malik then sees her she's "sneaking into the ballroom." Malik then remembers his aide is following him and wonders if the aide will be questioning why "they weren't heading towards the ballroom." Huh?
Is it possible to be wearing a poofy dress and have an attractive rear end?
Shanelle ends up near a corner and feels someone behind one. "Standing up straight, she tried to use her peripheral vision to figure out what had changed. To the left of her, she saw a...man in a tuxedo. To the right"...Malik. How was she seeing all that in her peripheral?
Maybe I'm a weirdo but I have to ask. How do a female's nipples getting hard mean she's attracted to a guy? I don't get it. "...he knew she was as affected by their nearness as he was."
"It is rare for two people to be this attracted to each other..." Um, I'm pretty sure that would just be lust, not love.
They're kissing. At first Malik is holding Shanelle, then he sets her down. But then, "...trying to get closer, he LIFTED her back up into his arms." BUT THEN: Shanelle mentions her knees getting weak from the kiss. If Malik is holding her, she wouldn't be having that problem. "And all of that was before he lifted her into his arms..." So was Malik just constantly picking her up, then putting her back down?
Oh while they're kissing (above)- "Shanelle thought that the kiss earlier in the night had been a fluke..." Wasn't the kiss from the previous day/night?
The mention of her trying to sneak away to the kitchen to 'bake cookies'...IDK, just sounded weird. I mean, she's a quest in Malik's palace? and wouldn't there be tons of random people everywhere and she thought she could just go into the kitchen and start baking?