Hate to say this, but it’s another rubber stamped novella.
This story is extremely formulaic. I really don’t know how many times I’ve read something like this, but after five times, it gets boring. Changing the names, the location, and the profession that couldn’t be sabotaged didn’t add any breath of fresh air to the story line.
Length: Novella. Really
Character development: That’s my problem. NO character development. Abel is an NFL superstar. Lacey could have been a superb pianist had she not had become pregnant by Abel on prom night of his senior year. He goes to college, totally oblivious to Lacey’s condition. Her parents disowns her because she’s pregnant. He goes professional. She becomes a single mom and a waitress looking for a way out of her podunk home town. So what do you think happens next? You’re probably right.
Emotional factor: None whatsoever. You’d think Ms. Pierce could have wrung out the heart a bit about the fatherless waif who is Lacey’s only emotional support as she has cut all ties with her high school friends. (How can you do that in a tiny, hick town? Everybody in Lakefield, Minnesota knew my mom's family business!) I don’t like Lacey all that much because she had opportunities to go to NYC on a full musical scholarship, and single moms DO do well on a fully paid ride. But, no. She has to play the victim. She doesn’t even show up to see if she could hack it despite the fact she yearned to get the hell out of Dodge. Yes, she has selfless reasons for her not saying anything to Abel (or Liam — see below) about the existence of their child. As for Abel, he has an aggressive streak that doesn’t mix well with all the alcohol he drinks, and this was a real turn-off for me. If I were Lacey and had any doubts on whether or not Abel would make a good father, that alone would make me disappear into the hills. It’s not that he was verbally abusive, but the potential is there big-time. I should know, coming from a family of alcoholics on both sides.
Speed of action: It plods along… then ends too quickly. What was the rush? Most novel/las have epilogues that neatly wraps up the action. Considering that I’m reading an ARC, I hope this missing detail is corrected.
Predictability: See above.
Credibility issues: Okay, here’s my biggest beef. If you were a grandmother and knew that your only granddaughter was living in a roach motel, would you just allow that to happen? HELL, NO! So I don’t understand why Emily, Abel’s mother, didn’t do anything! I don’t even like her lackadaisical attitude. “What will be will be” clap trap. Sorry, but my grandmother would never do that, and she had less cash than Emily and her husband had. And it didn’t need to be cash. Don’t they have this BIG, NEW house Abel bought them? Lame, lame, lame.
Grammar and technical errors: There were many silly misspellings that could have been corrected had the writer just read her manuscript aloud. (If you don’t have an editor to do it for you, this is the best way to do it yourself because if it comes out of your mouth awkward, you know you have a problem.) I also noticed that on occasion, the writer switched Abel’s name to Liam. (Was that the original name of the character?) I hope that these are ironed out by the time it's published, but still, girl! If you want my glowing opinion, you need to clean it up first before allowing me to read it because it matters to me!
This novella was way too formulaic. It needed something different to spice it up as well as a good editor to tell Haley Pierce that (as well as catch all those spelling and wrong word errors that annoyed me terribly).
I received a free copy of this book via Booksprout and am voluntarily leaving an honest, no-punches-pulled review.