There are so many things wrong with this book that I find it difficult to decide what to start with.
For one thing, it's written at a grade 6 level. The grammar and word choice left me shaking my head every other paragraph. I find it troubling that some people are reviewing it as being a brilliant, 5 star worthy novel. This is a 2-star book at best, if only by virtue of the spelling and grammar mistakes the author makes throughout it.
The dialogue is also hilariously BAD. It's as if the characters were part of a children's sock puppet show, and no apparent effort was made by the author to even
try
to portray them as "real" people. They come across as shallow, cliche versions of D&D builds, completely lacking personalities. They are also, apparently, incapable of simple logic, and their attempts at social interaction are just .. weird. It's almost as if the author were a child trying to write a dialogue between adults, having never really had a serious conversation himself.
Another glaring issue is that the author treats female characters (few as they are) as nothing more than sex objects for the main character to admire/desire. Their descriptions almost always revolve around sexualizing them to the fullest possible extent, and any interaction with the main character will, without fail, involve him checking out their cleavages, or otherwise thinking about how hot and desirable they are. They - naturally - all enjoy wearing either very tight fitting, or skimpy outfits, and various scenes are worked into the novel that involve them walking around in towels, etc., adding zero value to the story.
On to the main character, Nicholas. He's painfully naive. Inhumanly so. No one who has gone though the equivalent of an elite military college, and survived an actual combat situation could be this oblivious to even the simplest realities of the world around him. His thought process is so simplistic as to remind me of a sock puppet more so than a human being.
The story is incredibly predictable, and really serves as the death knell to an already troubled novel. The plot twists can be seen coming a mile away, but as the main character behaves as a child, he's always taken completely by surprise. What I found particularly hilarious, is that when pushed into a tight spot, the author will actually take the time to write a lengthy monologue, describing Nick's mental process for finding the best solution to his predicament. Let's just say that problem solving ain't Nick's strong suit, OK?
I once again must stress that it feels as if a child were writing this story, with no real experience as to how the real world works, or as to how adult interactions flow.
Save yourselves some time and skip this book. Better yet, skip this author.