Too much emotional drama, too much boring details, not enough cohesion.
[Not Enough Quinn!! 😫]
So, I don’t like that the author lessened Quinn in order to resolve his romance with Sawyer.
He’s suddenly fitting in better, laughing, smiling, acting more like the others.
More, the author lessened his relationship and emotions with Elijah, turning it into just benefits.
They’re bond is more than that, even if it wasn’t love of their lives sort of thing.
It’s that whole, oh so special chickie, that everybody wants trope.
Plus, the author clearly has issues with blending multiple strands in a story. They focus on each aspect singly, meaning we spend 30-50% setting up, waffling, irrelevant to the main plot.
Then we waste more on emotional drama and day to day abstracts, with the smallest percentage on the actual main plot and it’s subsequent action and urban fantasy.
It’s not enough. These books need a massive edit, and someone to help blend all the threads into one, so the pacing doesn’t drag, and we don’t get stuck having to skip over inconsequential details, or worse, end up having to read everything multiple times.
Also, continuity on details and characteristics over the series, and within each, needs serious work.
All of which is a massive disappointment, as the world building is something worth reading, as is the plot ideas overall.
It’s simply the execution that is failing. As is portions of the research and fact building. There are details that just don’t make sense, don’t fit the story or it’s world, or the characters created within.
It’s baffling, how an author can create an idea and personality, and then blatantly contradict it..😳🤷♀️
It’s almost like it’s been written in chunks at different times, with the idea changing in each moment.
E.g.: the team are all about protecting others, making a better world, etc.
Then they say how they’re not going to throw away their lives trying to save others, that they should just evacuate the people, and let the baddie have their way. That those in charge are wasting lives by not doing so.
They later decide they should help, ‘cause said baddie has killed so many…
[p.s. in B2 they could have evacuated everyone to safety and didn’t. Nothing was said about those who died as a result, or were there any regrets mentioned regarding the decision.]
This kind of inconsistency was common.
The FMC thinks Jasper is oh so good and moral, but then criticises others for their lack of willingness to see the world as it is, and how this costs the innocent.
Just as everybody keeps calling her an assassin, despite her only ever having killed as a means of defence or coercion, while the same can’t be said of other agents. Yet no one is calling out on that, contrary to their rabid need to defend, or her contrary personality.
Bluntly the list is just too long to go over.
So, I’m done with this series, it’s just too messy, too long, and too flawed.
For the record, the romance of the relationships is fairly limited, with the greater focus on the drama of said relationships instead.
Same is true for the action and mystery portion.
Think 55% drama, 20% day to day minutiae, 15% action & mystery, and 5% romance with two or three sex scenes, with almost no seduction.