cliché and needs work
If you can take a chosen mate, and mark that mate, it is ridiculous that Kyle still trying to go after Patience. And her sister, who he mated in front of everyone, never clues in? When she has werewolf enhanced hearing? What? She runs off every time Kyle insists on speaking to Patience? He’s yelling and growling loudly, yet this is never heard by anyone else, and particularly her? It’s ridiculous writing such. And four years of him, knowing she was his mate, and able to resist the bond that long, then all of a sudden he is incapable of resisting it? It is all so juvenile in writing. Absolutely unbelievable. Should’ve went with no more than four months. And what a crack sister, he’s over here talking about how he does not care about your sister, no longer wants her, wants you, and you are going to leave your sister with that? Patience has no thought to just tell her sister. Why would she want to leave her with someone like that? A man that is pining after someone else? That was thought to be a good idea, to not hurt her sister? Pahlease.
More lending to the writing being very juvenile. Thingy? That’s what she refers to the male anatomy as? I’m sorry I touched your thingy? I nearly closed the book and returned it to Amazon after reading that. Then there’s Titus and his lack of explaining and immediate dismissal of Patience’s inquiry on who the cliche glaring woman is that’s present as soon as they get out the car when they JUST arrived at the pack house. MAJOR EYE-ROLLING HERE. She asked again later same day, gets I don’t wanna talk about it, tells him why not what are you hiding from me, can you repeat he doesn’t wanna talk about it, she size, and then his replies to say how he can never say no to her can he? then he says, I’ll tell you tonight, I promise. Something wrong with his mouth that he can’t explain right now? And she just accepts that?! Ridiculousness. Of course, there’s a cliché run into the same woman not even a couple hours later, who claims to have been his true mate that he rejected. And surprise, surprise, please imagine the absolute sarcasm in my voice, when she ask him again that night, he still don’t wanna talk about it, tries to say he told her he would tell her tonight, and she’s like it is tonight, and he still deflects. Then he just leaves the room, no explanation, as if such is not owed. And his and his rejected mate story was stupid, there’s just no other way to say it, it was stupid.
Patience still had not spoken the words of rejection back to the mate who rejected her, who is supposed to be in love with her sister, yet, she continued to hang on? Even after he mates her? And again goes back to the ridiculousness of four years of knowing he’s her mate and vice versa. Length of time was way too long to be believable.
And when she calls home, why is her sister answering the phone? She’s now the Luna of the pack, with Kyle, the alpha of that pack, why is she answering the phone when Patience calls home to speak to her parents? And more why is Kyle there still talking foolishness? And the sister still doesn’t hear anything?
How is it that Patience was taken, and Titus doesn’t feel anything? They’re fully mated. Just got done talking about how they can feel each other. Huge plothole. This book needs some major editing. Because it also doesn’t make sense that the rejected mate of Titus was still there. 3 to 4 different times she approached Patience, and Patience doesn’t says anything to Titus? Then oh look now the formerly rejected mate plots and gets others to take Patience and gets away with her AND her sister? Who why was she and Micah still in Titus’ territory many day later anyway? Cliche stupid. The mating ceremonial to Alpha and Luna is held months later? That doesn’t even make sense.
Conversation for who are supposed to be adults is very immature and juvenile. This story needs a redo, with maturity and originality added. Skimming and skipping got me to the end.