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320 pages, ebook
First published September 3, 2019
A tingle begins in her toes; her cheekbones lift. This, despite a distrust of hope.Is she - smiling? What are lifted cheekbones?
Living in the Bronx, the cousin always introduces LeeRoy to the latest.Arghhhh. That’s my least favorite form of dependent clause.
Eating, though, can’t be imagined, not when more time will be spent on this lumbering truck. Not as tormenting as the boat/bus, it still bounces and swerves aplenty.PICK A WORD. Slashes are for unpublished drafts.
Every sentence forces her to contemplate subject-predicate agreement, matching tenses (remembering the tense is determined by the first word in a verb phrase), transitive verbs needing a direct object, or intransitive verbs requiring none, or irregular verbs that can’t add -ed for past tense, then the pronoun must match the noun, then ridiculous articles “a, an, the” (if dismissed the meaning would remain unaltered), dangling modifiers, gerunds that can be subjects or objects, then parts of speech that require dizzying costume changes. After that, she must pronounce the whole scheme and hope her brother can understand.
He parks underneath a scraggly tree, the only shade near a store. “Be right back.”Mostly, though, the writing threw me out of the story, to the point where I wondered: why does the put-upon LeeRoy stay? Where are the rest of Mr. Morgan’s employees, and what was he planning to do if his neighbor’s not-quite-adopted unforeseen long-lost sister hadn’t shown up, along with a ride somehow persuaded to stay out the summer?
Three concise words, without any fat. English at its best.