Edit: Original review I tilted to 2 stars. Decreasing to 1 star to offset the authors own rating of 5 stars. Don't be a douchebag author and rate your own book 5 stars.
Scourge of the Betrayer... what to say?
To start with, I may be able to save you some time and money by revising the description of this story to 'Captain Killcoin orders somebody (usually, but not limited to, his own men under his command) to do something, they question his authority, and then we get 10 pages of Killcoin putting on his Hamlet hat and berating said person with 'The lady doth protest too much, methinks'. Rinse. Repeat in three pages.
Killcoin, mongering brute and tactical mastermind that he is, (or so we're told) apparently commands no respect from anyone, least of all those under his command, and unfortunately, the author uses these insubordination scenes (nearly as frequent as paragraphs are in the story) to most uncreatively divulge the plot elements. What's in the box? Well, he can't tell you until you question his authority (again).
Killcoin's diatribes after said instances are also painfully redundant; hitting and restating the same point, over and over and over and over...
Here's an example late in the book... these are rife throughout, this is just the one that is freshest in my mind:
<<"Dispose of [person] as you will." When no one responded immediately, he looked up and glanced from face to face... >>
[Warning.. incoming over the top Hamlet scene #3,490]... and here we go!
<<<"Do you think me a callous beast, that I don't spare more thought for [person]? Should I have thrown myself across [person's] body in grief, and railed at the tragedy of it, while my own men looked on, spiteful that I'd done no such thing for the fallen [others]? Should I have stripped off my shirt and lashed myself for failing to protect [person], to see [person] to a better end?">>>
Yeah yeah Cap.. we GET THE POINT... no need to try to drown us in a rhetorical golden shower. You did what you could. You only needed to say it ONCE (and not even once really, since you're the guy supposedly in charge, and having to explain yourself to your subordinates is a bit odd). But it doesn't end there. We know this person is dead, but Cap wants to reiterate the point SOME MORE.. here we go again, in the very same paragraph:
<<<"No.[Person]'s gone. Dead. But unlike the others, [person] has nowhere to go now. No one waits for [person], hopes for [person's] return, pines. No children. No spouse. No one. And now [person's] no one......"A body. Only a body.">>>
Holy "horsecunt" (a term you'll become intimately familiar with in this book). How many times do we need to be injected and then bashed repeatedly over the head with the idea that this person is dead, and not coming back? Note that this scene happens after we've already been subjected to several pages of grieving, and yet we're still going to talk about it AGAIN! This happens throughout the book, as if the author isn't quite sure you grabbed the point from the previous sentence in which he mentioned it three times, so he throws another 2-3 instances of it in the following sentence just for good measure. Killcoin's character doesn't say much in many scenes in this book, only to have diarrhea of the "horsecunt" every time his authority is being questioned (which happens at the frequency of making the reader want to facepalm). He also manages to transform from a say-nothing brute to a tragic, melancholy, woe-is-me, Shakespearean scholar in the drop of the hat and no one can state and then rephrase (again and again.. did I mention the redundancy yet?) a rhetorical question like Killcoin can.
This book is also weirdly paced and will sometimes leave the story entirely to focus on irrelevant material. Examples of this include (but are certainly not limited to) a scene in the first half of the book where Arki overhears Killcoin having sex with an innkeeper's daughter. The premise of the scene itself is fine, but considering we get page after page of description of this, and that it ultimately serves no purpose, why do we need anything more than a paragraph or two? A second example of this is in the last 5% of the book where we get several longwinded pages of description of a walk to a barons house.... this is when you choose to do your world building?? At (what should be) the climax of your book?? The burial of a friend also comes to mind, where Hamlet...errr Killcoin... once again soapboxes his opinion laced with rhetorical questions to arrive at the conclusion of 'it doesn't really matter to the reader, so why are you spending so much time on it'.
You just can't trust the slew of 5-star reviews that come out with a book's release anymore. Don't get me wrong, this isn't a terrible book by any means, but it's not a good one either. It's certainly not 'Fantasy Debut of the Year', and to say such is to say there's no other new fantasy author out there worth reading. It's a pretty cover and a great premise smothered in mediocre execution.
And character development... what to say here? All these five star reviews keep raving about character development, but this is a first person narrative so the only development we see is in interaction where Arki is present. Given his scenes with the other mercs in the band are few and far between, and the dual personality disorder of Killcoin, there's virtually no development to be had. Other than Lloi, Killcoin and Arki, no characters stand out. Actually, I might even venture to say other than Lloi, no characters stand out. In fact, I just finished the book and can make virtually no distinction between any of the Captain's other men. There is virtually no development there.
I keep reading in other reviews that 'if you like your fantasy gritty, if you like to read GRRM, Joe Abercrombie, Glen Cook, you might like this book'. I couldn't disagree more. That list, with exception to the omission of Robert E. Howard, reads as a 'Who's Who' among my favorite authors, and I see no resemblance between Scourge and anything the other authors have written.
Rating:
Story: 1 Star - Again, great premise wrapped up and heavily diluted in a solution of "Who cares?". There's nothing substantial here. It's like a homeopathic version of fantasy. This is a 75 page story that has been expanded to 250+ for no good reason. The reader is kept away from the main story for approximately 60-75% of the book, and once it's finally out there, you'll find yourself saying, 'This is what they're doing? THIS is what I've waited for?'
Characters: 2 Stars - Other than Lloi, I didn't find myself liking or disliking (in a good, I want to read more about this evil guy, kind of way) anyone. The main selling point of the story, that being a first person account of an embedded reporter in a mercenary group, also ends up being a huge problem in that the author doesn't give the main character enough interaction with secondary characters other than Lloi or Killcoin and so they are all underdeveloped.
Reviewers Tilt: 2 Stars - I'll tilt this review to 2 stars since I'm aware this is the author's first book. I loved the premise, and disliked the execution. The characters, with exception to Lloi, I couldn't give a lick about. It was a chore to finish given I didn't really care if the characters lived or died.
Good gritty fantasy isn't just about "horsecunts" and bloody battles. It's also about pacing, character development, giving the reader a vested interest in the story, all of which this story is woefully lacking in.
Normally I would recommend reading a sample first for this book, except that the first 20-30 pages are by far the strongest this book has to offer. That's when we find out the gist of what gets the group together, and we actually have some character development as the whole group is together (albeit it's only a few pages, but it's the best the book has to offer). Ultimately, a sample of the first few pages will not be indicative of the quality of the story overall.