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331 pages, Kindle Edition
Published October 18, 2018
"Your decision, milord." Masolon shrugged, gazing at the two faltering fronts at the left side of the wall. "But when the odds are not in your favor, avoiding risks is a luxury you cannot afford."
Good character interaction and relationships. Masolon and Rona have a strange kind of chemistry, both of them headstrong, smart and driven. They come to care about each other in a pretty organic way throughout the whole book, despite their rough start. General Gramus is a prideful man with a singular purpose, more or less, in protecting Rona and helping her reclaim her throne. His feuding with Masolon in the first part of the book adds a sort of tense air to their interactions later on, and a source of struggle for Rona as she tries to balance things with both of them. This made for interesting, layered conflict inside of our main cast.
I was glad to see Frankil and Antram and Ziyad again. I really felt some excitement, even, when they showed up. It's always fun to see familiar faces, and watching the friendly, relaxed way Masolon interacts with them shows good contrast to the arguments and fights he has with many other characters throughout. I enjoy many of the side characters and the different opinions and experiences they confront each other with...
So why just three stars?
While I enjoy many things about this novel, and I absolutely love watching the story and characters grow and progress from what they were in the first book, I simply cannot ignore its most glaring issue:
Poorly written prose. A flaw that it shares with the previous installment in this series, and one of the only flaws in which I haven't seen some sort of improvement between books. The writing is genuinely hard to parse a great deal of the time. There are so many clunky sentences, misplaced adverbs, and strangely worded descriptions, that I genuinely struggled to stay immersed in the story a great deal of the time.
This is truly disappointing to me, as I felt the story and characters showed very solid improvement, and I really wanted to lose myself in this world. I would try to fix sentences in my head as I read them, forcing the words to make sense as best I could, but the effort still dragged me out of the world of Queen of Rebels and back into reality in a pretty jarring manner. An unfortunate thing, for the method through which all information is conveyed to often be as disruptive and confusing as a city bus driving through a beautiful fairy tale ballroom.
Final thoughts
While I could not ignore the issues with the writing, and those issues have absolutely influenced my overall rating, I must say that this story did pique my interest. There is so much potential here. I was fully engaged in discovering how Masolon and Rona would get out of the corners they were forced into, and I often couldn't foresee how they would manage to overcome their obstacles. The minor characters have distinct personalities which really helped me to distinguish one from another.
The battles are described with a real sense of weight and I could feel the passage of time as they were fought. I liked the information about each country included at the end, as I'm a sucker for lore, and it also helps to further solidify the world building. I have seen so much improvement, and it has been a pleasure to watch this story begin to better realize itself.
I can truly and sincerely say that when I manage to look past the flaws in the writing, I enjoy this story and these characters, and I'm interested in how both are evolving as Karim continues to improve.
"Yesterday a prisoner, today a commander, and tomorrow who knows?"