Head-hopping within scenes. I'll come back to this but I wanted to say this out of the gate: this book jumps between POVs without scene breaks, and more importantly, without a reliable omniscient view. I would say it's relatively close 3rd person which is what makes the head-hopping distracting. One second you're in Dylan's head, the next you're in Tristan's, and back again, all within the space of a paragraph.
Be warned, this gives the book a very amateurish feel. Along with the prose. If you're reading reviews to decide whether to give this one a chance, I think that needs to be said up front. Head-hopping *can* work, but only, I've found, when done by a writer who is able to make the transitions smooth, clean, and most importantly, clear. In this book there are no transitions.
I want to start by saying what drew me to this book, which might explain my less-than-shining review. I saw the cover online and yes, it is beautiful, but the title was what did it. I don't remember where I heard about this book but wherever it was did *not* make it clear that it was YA. I believed, based on whatever blurb I read, that it was Adult, in the vein of The Lovely Bones.
It is not.
Fine, not a problem. I love YA. Unfortunately once I got going, it felt more like Middle Grade than YA. More on that later.
Obviously if I'd come on to Goodreads I'd have quickly realised the error of my thinking, but the premise is so hook-y -- a girl escapes a train crash believing she's the sole survivor, but the truth is, she's the only casualty. That's how the blurb (and I wish I could find it again because it was misleading beyond all belief) portrayed it. As I said, it felt very Lovely Bones-ish, set in Scotland, so even better.
And positives I can share, before I get to the nitty-gritty:
1) As I said, the premise is fantastic.
2) The character of Tristan had all my sympathy. For many reasons. (His backstory, his horrific "job" with no experience actually living, and yes, because he had to put up with Dylan's whinging throughout the entire book).
3) The concept of the world was interesting, though it could have been fleshed out more.
4) The character of Jonas, though we see him only briefly, was a nice touch.
On to what made me give this a 2-star review -- and this is where I have to point out that on Goodreads, 2 stars means, "It was ok." Which to me, is quite generous for 2 stars. Usually 2 stars seems to indicate, "It was excruciating but it wasn't the worst thing I've ever read." I gather most people think 2 stars on Goodreads means the latter anyhow, but I digress.
Problem #1: Head-hopping.
The biggest issue I had with this book was head-hopping. As I said at the top, the author switches POVs between main characters back and forth and back and forth throughout the chapters. I've never seen this in a non-indie, published book before. This is supposedly a major no-no, so I'm not sure how this slid by the editors but presumably this is a small press.
Problem #2: The prose.
The language she uses made this book -- apart from the kissing and undressing -- feel Middle Grade instead of YA. Which is especially disappointing given I'd inadvertently believed it was Adult when I downloaded it to my Kindle. She uses the same phrases and words over and over to the point where it feels as if there were never any proper revisions done. Amping up the verbs chosen would've gone a long way, along with cutting out cliches like "butterflies in her stomach."
A few examples:
"It was faded and showing signs and wear and tear." (Surely only one of those, faded or signs of wear and tear, is necessary).
"...drunks, weirdos, people who wanted to tell you their life stories and philosophise on the meaning of life."
"Her face fell into a mask of confusion and unease."
"His eyes were magnetic, and they seemed to see through to her very core."
"Tristan broke through her thoughts, bringing her back to the present."
"Her heart started to beat faster and she had to concentrate on inhaling through her nose to keep her breathing under control."
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I also think the Middle Grade-feel is helped by the clingy, whiny, immature tone of Dylan (who I kept forgetting was the girl -- just not used to Dylan being a girl's name but that's on me). She read more like a 10-year-old girl than a late-teens girl.
Problem #3: Believability.
As others have rightly pointed out, it's odd how Dylan accepted being dead so casually. She acted like it was no biggie and was more worried about what her face and hair looked like to her ancient ferryman-in-the-shape-of-a-cute-teen-boy. If we'd had even a bit more regret and despair at being separated from her life so young, from any dreams she might have had (we don't get much of a sense of where she wanted to go in life, apart from Aberdeen to meet her dad), then it might've been easier to accept these oddities.
And also, on the topic of believability, I found it really sweet that Tristan cared about her, but kind of hard to imagine how he -- an, as I said, ancient ferryman who's never lived a life of his own -- falls in love and willingly risks his job and existence for her. He's seen it all. That's understandable -- what we need to know is WHAT about this girl, this soul, makes him fall in love and risk it all? We need to be shown that, and we never are. Dylan, as she is in this book, is not believably a girl someone like Tristan would risk it all for. She's a whiny teenager who acts at least 5 years younger than she is, who has only one friend and therefore is likely missing some social skills, but somehow manages with this being who has ferried thousands of souls over hundreds of years across the "wasteland" to their afterlives.
Also in this vein, we're to believe that Tristan has been a ferryman for untold centuries and has never once thought of trying to escape? Hmm. That's... troubling. If he's an automaton or an android, okay, but I don't think he is.
Problem #4: Length
This book went on way longer than it should have, given the content. For the majority of the book, it's trudge through wasteland, face minor danger before safehouse, sleep in safehouse. Trudge, danger, safehouse. But the danger never feels real, and because it's the same cycle repeated, it feels like the book isn't going anywhere. The characters do get to know each other a little better each night in each safehouse, but because the surroundings barely change, and the description and language is really rudimentary, it begins to blur together. For the way this was written and the repetitive nature of the journey, it could've stood to be about 40 pages shorter.
I'll stop there because I feel horribly critical, but I can't lie -- I was really disappointed by this book, how it was sold to me, how poorly it was edited, and the messy way the head-hopping was handled. I ended up skimming the last 25% because it felt like it was never going to end.
I will say again that I think the author was on to a fantastic idea with this book, but I sadly feel it missed the mark. But I stand behind my 2 stars: It was "okay." I wouldn't re-read it, nor would I recommend it. Oddly, the book seems to have a major following in China.