The books the child thief and deep shadows by Bella Forrest are the first two books in the child thief series.
It promised suspense, action and romance in a dystopian futuristic America.
It is a not well-written and not well-constructed story about a young woman trying to get her child back and as a bonus bring down the governmental system with it. However, we have a heroine stumbling around, not really knowing what she is doing, neglecting possible failure, consequences and repercussions. A heroine who apparently knows as less as the reader about the world she is living in and the “enemy” she is facing. The book proclaims a grand goal and operates on a small scale.
For me, it only achieved a slow burn romance, which was believable and actually nice to read. Although it got a little teenage over dramatic at times. When the heroine had again some “eye rolling” inner debate of what to do and what not.
The action was also there at times.
After having read both released books, the child thief and deep shadows, I am more disappointed than having had a good read.
The governmental system and social structure the story is based on, sounded very questionable, although based on a good idea it still seemed tenuous at best.
Additionally, the whole rebellion idea, got weird pretty quickly, as the characters don’t use any violence. Not even for self defence. I am not sure if this is meant for a younger audience. But it is ridiculous, to watch them running around, equipped with weapons they never use. They never fight back. Starting a rebellion without being trained in combat or self defence. Carrying weapons not shooting them, when in one of their dangerous situations. I haven’t found the purpose in that. If the characters actively decided to lead some kind of ghandi rebellion, good for them, but nothing is mentioned as of its reasoning.
The same goes for the world building. In the first book, there is literally none. It is set in the year 2103 and I continuously wondered how this world looked like. What kind of futuristic landscape, technology, infrastructure?
During the story, some tech is used and mentioned, like a stealth aircraft and some kind of robotic suits, for example. But I couldn’t for the life of me figure out how they looked like. How it was possible they could fly with this aircraft undetected. Telling me it has stealth mode is not enough. How those suits did not stand out while they walked through the streets or took the train. How it is possible to not attract attention walking around in masks. Those and more inconsistencies through out the book kept on piling up. I could list so many, but simply gave up. Few got answered later on. But it looked more like an after thought, then fitting them into the story when it first came up.
The second book revealed more landscape details, yet it appeared the society and landscape took several jumps back right into the industrial area of the 17 th century than a fantastical dystopian future. Littered with factories, poor people living in rundown places, cramped together, starving and terrorised by the rich factory owners and government.
Even a house is once described as looking like a medieval church, I wonder how an American 19 year old girl knows anything about medieval churches, not having left the country, seen Europe or having had any educational reference to that.
The first books cover states “one girl decides to fight back”.
Well, our main character Robin does indeed do decide to fight back, tho she isn’t the only one, she is one of many. And additionally most of the time she has no clue what she actually does, which contradicts the whole idea and purpose of this book.
She does not contribute anything special to the table at all in regard of skills or talents.
The main plot looses its path early on, splinters in several directions, in several plot threads which divert from the main path.
Apparently the author plans a couple of more books for this series. As the first two, didn’t achieve anything for the main goal nor even the splintered plot threads.
Nothing was solved, nothing was answered, there was no progress, nothing. It only opened up more questions.
Most of the time the characters stumble around not knowing what they are actually doing. Getting swept from one direction to the next. With changing goals by the minute. And it is questionable what significance they are actually playing. As there is no reference to how big the population is. The capitol, the government and such. Are we talking here about a country with 300 000 people like Island, where 100 rebels are a significant amount. Or are we talking about a country with 60 million people, where 100 people are a drop of water on a hot stone. There is not even the factor what role the media plays. It is all not really thought through.
The main character’s goals sway from getting her child back, to dreaming of a rebellion to topple the government, having no idea how, to fleeing the country with her child, to not achieving anything and get back to her sad life as a factory worker, to rescuing the captured friends and getting rescued several times by mysterious black men. It is chaotically written and plotted.
The most annoying part was the writing style and the heroine. Listening to her inner monologues, with her wild theories of what ifs and whys. Every few pages. Especially her silly righteousness in explaining why people would do or say anything, assuming she knows it all. It is not a good writing style when using a first person narrator, to make the main character assume and tell what other persons are thinking, feeling and their actions behind it. Teaching and explaining for the reader everything, like a mix between first and third person narrator. Not appealing.
I started early on to scroll over her musings and explanations, her wild theories of whys and what ifs, her reasoning and moral based teachings of what is right and wrong.
Because it was not only unnecessary to the story it is also unnatural to think like that all the time and more and more a page filler than a real contribution to the plot. Especially in the second book.
It was tiring watching the characters stumble around. The whole book mostly consisted more of wild theories than action. It was tiresome to live more or less mainly in the head of the main character, going back and forth, arguing and debating all in her mind. For nothing at all. Throwing around wild theories and actually achieving nothing. At times she even thought, she is the main reason for several actions behind a big rebellion with a hundred people and their unachieved goals. A great delusion of grandeur without having contributed anything at all.
All in all, these books were disappointing. The ideas were good, but it needed at least one year of more work and rewriting. Those two first books could have been literally made into one, with a good editor and little more love and professionalism for the detail and writing, the world building and society. Potential but not used.
To be honest, if it wasn’t for the kindle unlimited status I wouldn’t have read the book, especially not the second book.
It could have been so much better. The author has so much unused potential compared to many other books I have read.