Aw, I wanted to like this book. I adore nothing more than stories of besties falling in love. Alas, I’ve only unkind words...
Mediocre, unrefined writing. Periods were employed wantonly, inserted to chop sentences up in barbaric fashion merely in an attempt to create a sort of tempo/dramatic effect. Sentences starting with verbs that contained not the slightest pronoun—I do get the intention, as someone who plays with words, but it just didn’t work here the way it was executed. Then there were more basic mistakes that lead me to think this work was either rushed or lacked editing. Or both! Unfortunate.
Also, the author didn’t do enough research on a subject she employed significantly yet was unfamiliar with. Specifically, Dungeons and Dragons. Those scenes were blatantly engineered from imagination, based upon cursory knowledge at best. The nerdy/geeky world she potted one of her protagonists in didn’t feel genuine, and so her character suffered in credibility as a result. I’ve never played pen-and-paper DnD, though I am somewhat acquainted with literature pertaining to it. Even so, I could see the author picked monsters at semi-random (casual nature of the names?), not respecting the fact that people struggling to kill a goblin would likely get murdered by werewolves. Then zombies, followed by a dragon? Though I’ll admit I looked those monsters up to confirm the suspicions I had when reading. Anyway, this is just me nitpicking.
Had the prose flowed better, had the characters been more believable and engaging, I’d not have minded any lack of expertise. But I’m sorry, even if I’m sure words like these are unpleasant, I just can’t say this was very well written, and I’d suspect the author cannot be extremely proud either. Do keep writing though, Lucy!
On the bright side, I did finish the book.
Edit: Wait, there WERE cute moments. Only, the flaws came later so they stuck more, for me.