Fun & engaging read - Needs editing!
I'm thoroughly enjoying this series and eagerly look forward to the next book!!! There's plenty of plot and character development, which keeps me engaged.
There are a few issues I have with Bailey's works.
1. Editing - Bailey's sentence structure often reads likes how a person thinks, not how they speak. If an editor were to spend some time rephrasing sentences, deleting excess words, and tightening up a handful of grammatical errors, it would VASTLY improve the quality of the story.
2. Sometimes the dialog is too elementary or middle school. It could be saucier and snarkier. The characters lack that feeling of superiority and entitlement, which is often associated with high school teens.
3. Sex - the first couple sex scenes in the series were good, but after that they all look and feel the same - lots of gazing into eyes, kissing, then everyone is dropping drawers and coming. What's missing??? The build up and variety. The traumatic moment, which is resolved by sharing I LOVE YOU'S, immediately followed by very vanilla sex... Isn't cutting it. Perhaps The heroine can play the siren a little, or the brothers can play with her together, or one can watch, maybe Sin in his ghostly form can add some dirty talk while Warren seduces/ is seduced?? And how about something besides missionary?
Just some food for thought!!!
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Anyway... Worth the read. Thanks!!!!!