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The GodStone Trilogy #1-3
Demon Wars
Be sure to "Look Inside." Hannah is an Elven pure-blood whose wealth came from Elven-themed nightclubs located in all the big city hot spots across the US, but she was by no means as wealthy as the twins. Traven and Vonen’s father is CEO of Gemantics, maker of GodStone protection rings coveted by the rich and famous.
Hannah proves herself a natural and obtains Alpha Master status using GodStone magic, but just as Hannah is finding her groove with Traven, all hell breaks loose when Elven Blood mages attack and blackmail the twins Father and force him to turn over control of his company.
What begins as a small-scale retribution to set things right, brings great peril for everyone she holds dear. Hannah and the twins are challenged with ancient magic and wind up pitted against a Demon God released into the human home world by the Elven Blood Mages.
That’s when the war spills over into the Elven Homelands, and that’s where the Demon God demonstrates just how insignificant Elves, GodStones, and Humans really are. A trilogy compressed into one book makes is a great value…Epic is an understatement!
Editor's note: Now a 3rd edition released 8.19.19 is three times as big as the 1st edition.
Hannah proves herself a natural and obtains Alpha Master status using GodStone magic, but just as Hannah is finding her groove with Traven, all hell breaks loose when Elven Blood mages attack and blackmail the twins Father and force him to turn over control of his company.
What begins as a small-scale retribution to set things right, brings great peril for everyone she holds dear. Hannah and the twins are challenged with ancient magic and wind up pitted against a Demon God released into the human home world by the Elven Blood Mages.
That’s when the war spills over into the Elven Homelands, and that’s where the Demon God demonstrates just how insignificant Elves, GodStones, and Humans really are. A trilogy compressed into one book makes is a great value…Epic is an understatement!
Editor's note: Now a 3rd edition released 8.19.19 is three times as big as the 1st edition.
614 pages, Kindle Edition
First published December 19, 2014
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August 26, 2019
Impressions of 'book #1' of the 'Elven Godstone Trilogy'.
I could barely make it through the first chapter (which unfortunately, read like a literary wank job) which is a real shame, since I quite enjoy stories with elves, but this missed the mark by a longgg shot for me.
I nearly DNF’d upon reading the following...
‘Hannah flushed with no way to stop it. The thing about flushing is that once you flush, the flush makes you flush more'.
Numerous punctuation and grammatical errors litter the pages along with clunky dialogue and a complete disconnect from the characters. For these reasons, it made it extremely difficult for me to immerse myself in the world the author was ‘trying’ to convey (which is completely overshadowed by the cringey thirst on display – no romantic build-up and pay-off here people.)
There was something about rings being discussed (which seemed like a central plot point albeit a messy one) with most of it being lost in terrible exposition and/or swallowed up by lines such as -
‘She knew that Traven and Vonen could get their needs satisfied by any girl they brought to their room simply by using their Elven push’.
‘That allowed Travens photographic memory to soak up the vision of her smooth privates, silky hair, smooth complexion, and perfect pair of firm breasts that had no knowledge of gravity’.
and face-palm worthy dialogue such as –
‘In order to make yours, I will need some of your EDNA (Elven DNA, I assume) …some peach fuzz…from a special place…I can help you get some of it…’
Skimming a little over the short, carelessly written ‘chapter two’ out of curiosity, a similar pattern of ‘telling’ and not ‘showing’ continued on from 'chapter one' and frankly, this ‘Elven Push’ concept (performed upon the housekeeper ‘Seleeha’) sounds incredibly rapey imo.
I commend anyone for giving writing a go, but this story needs a HUGE overall, editing work and contribution from sincere beta readers before having any price point placed on it.
Since posting my original review, it looks like the author has made a few changes, so here's an updated review.
"Her family was wealthy from Elven themed nightclubs in all the major hot spots across the country".
What country? America? England? Australia?
Who knows...
A couple of odd word choices and sentences are still rife throughout...
For example -
"She smiled at his loin size because up to now, she had only seen human boys".
Ah, "loin" refers to the side of the human body below the rib cage to just above the pelvis. If I'm to guess what the author actually meant, perhaps 'errection' 'length' or 'manhood' would've been more anatomically correct.
"Traven waded by Vonen and she literally saw magical phase glowing in the water around their hands".
"Traven waded by Vonen and she literally saw magical phase glowing in the water around their hands".
Perhaps?
"Traven waded over to Vonen, leaving Hannah speechless as she watched the twins invoke their phase with ease. Remarkable, she thought as the soft glow of their magic continued to swirl effortlessly around their hands beneath the water".
The classic sentence,
"Hannah flushed with no way to stop it. The thing about flushing is that once you flush, the flush makes you flush more".
is gone!
Including most of the unnecessary cringe mentioned in my original review and even the 'Elven push' (yikes) concept.
Chapter one has been cut down by a considerable amount of pages.
Perhaps if the author focused on world, character, plot and conflict establishment in chapter one (instead of presenting Hannah as an object for the twins) I would've continued on reading.
This story needs to be heavily edited as it still comes across as very juvenile and amateurish no matter what page you turn to. However, 'Demon Wars' does seem to have good bones to work from, so hopefully it is developed further to become a more well-rounded and polished series.
Additionally, I would like to refer the author to the 'Goodreads community' and 'Author' guideline pages due to his (now deleted) comments, where I was attacked for my opinion regarding his work. I sincerely hope they help.
I could barely make it through the first chapter (which unfortunately, read like a literary wank job) which is a real shame, since I quite enjoy stories with elves, but this missed the mark by a longgg shot for me.
I nearly DNF’d upon reading the following...
‘Hannah flushed with no way to stop it. The thing about flushing is that once you flush, the flush makes you flush more'.
Numerous punctuation and grammatical errors litter the pages along with clunky dialogue and a complete disconnect from the characters. For these reasons, it made it extremely difficult for me to immerse myself in the world the author was ‘trying’ to convey (which is completely overshadowed by the cringey thirst on display – no romantic build-up and pay-off here people.)
There was something about rings being discussed (which seemed like a central plot point albeit a messy one) with most of it being lost in terrible exposition and/or swallowed up by lines such as -
‘She knew that Traven and Vonen could get their needs satisfied by any girl they brought to their room simply by using their Elven push’.
‘That allowed Travens photographic memory to soak up the vision of her smooth privates, silky hair, smooth complexion, and perfect pair of firm breasts that had no knowledge of gravity’.
and face-palm worthy dialogue such as –
‘In order to make yours, I will need some of your EDNA (Elven DNA, I assume) …some peach fuzz…from a special place…I can help you get some of it…’
Skimming a little over the short, carelessly written ‘chapter two’ out of curiosity, a similar pattern of ‘telling’ and not ‘showing’ continued on from 'chapter one' and frankly, this ‘Elven Push’ concept (performed upon the housekeeper ‘Seleeha’) sounds incredibly rapey imo.
I commend anyone for giving writing a go, but this story needs a HUGE overall, editing work and contribution from sincere beta readers before having any price point placed on it.
Since posting my original review, it looks like the author has made a few changes, so here's an updated review.
"Her family was wealthy from Elven themed nightclubs in all the major hot spots across the country".
What country? America? England? Australia?
Who knows...
A couple of odd word choices and sentences are still rife throughout...
For example -
"She smiled at his loin size because up to now, she had only seen human boys".
Ah, "loin" refers to the side of the human body below the rib cage to just above the pelvis. If I'm to guess what the author actually meant, perhaps 'errection' 'length' or 'manhood' would've been more anatomically correct.
"Traven waded by Vonen and she literally saw magical phase glowing in the water around their hands".
Perhaps?
"Traven waded over to Vonen, leaving Hannah speechless as she watched the twins invoke their phase with ease. Remarkable, she thought as the soft glow of their magic continued to swirl effortlessly around their hands beneath the water".
The classic sentence,
"Hannah flushed with no way to stop it. The thing about flushing is that once you flush, the flush makes you flush more".
is gone!
Including most of the unnecessary cringe mentioned in my original review and even the 'Elven push' (yikes) concept.
Chapter one has been cut down by a considerable amount of pages.
Perhaps if the author focused on world, character, plot and conflict establishment in chapter one (instead of presenting Hannah as an object for the twins) I would've continued on reading.
This story needs to be heavily edited as it still comes across as very juvenile and amateurish no matter what page you turn to. However, 'Demon Wars' does seem to have good bones to work from, so hopefully it is developed further to become a more well-rounded and polished series.
Additionally, I would like to refer the author to the 'Goodreads community' and 'Author' guideline pages due to his (now deleted) comments, where I was attacked for my opinion regarding his work. I sincerely hope they help.
August 31, 2019
Demon Wars is a titanic novel with plenty of plot to get through and an interesting and diverse cast of characters, all wrapped up in a fascinating and creative setting where science and magic mix together and technology creates sorcery. With a complete trilogy you'll be able to enjoy every moment of Traven, Vonen, and Hannah's odyssey as they navigate corporate politics, dark magic, and fight to survive forces beyond them, and to maintain their friendship through it all. The size of the book makes it hard to get through at times and there's some things that could've been better but it was a truly enjoyable read.
June 22, 2024
Not for me
I honestly thought it was all over the place and I felt I was reading a first draft. I think the characters could had had more potential; however, I felt there was not enough background to develop the characters fully. It is def not my style at all. I was looking for a fantasy/action book; however, that was not what I received. I finished the book and I am sure the ending leaves an open door for more books but I am def not reading those.
I honestly thought it was all over the place and I felt I was reading a first draft. I think the characters could had had more potential; however, I felt there was not enough background to develop the characters fully. It is def not my style at all. I was looking for a fantasy/action book; however, that was not what I received. I finished the book and I am sure the ending leaves an open door for more books but I am def not reading those.
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